It's your fault

about drunk driving

You get behind the wheel

knowing you've had too much to drink

you're so messed up

you can't even think

 

stupidly you start the car

and start to pull out

no thoughts on what could happen

"everything will be fine" you said "no doubt"

 

you probably don't even regret

what happened that night

no guilt at all

am I right?

 

because of you it's a possibillity

I might lose a good friend

you don't even care, do you?

you don't care who's life you end

 

My friend is now in a coma

because of you, it's all your fault

you're to blame

making the stupid choice, look at the results

Author's Note

My friend got hit by a drunk driver he has a profile on here. kalen cms night . he is now in the hospital in a coma.

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Depressing to think of all the accidents that happen because of the reason of drunk drivers. You wrote this well thinking of your friend.

[Bridgette's Ink]

Powerful to say the least. I wrote a poem similar to this on the topic of drunk driving but you did it much better justice than I ever could. I hope your friend iss okay and I will keep him in my prayers (though this poem was written awhile back)

[DearSweetAgony]

Wow, thats very sad. My friend got hit by a drunk driver too, but she died. I hope by you writing this, it will allow you to filter out all of your bad emotions.

[Lynn]

I think this is a deep poem. It's cool and kinda depressing.

[Que]

You did a brilliant job with letting through your emotions in this piece. They were so raw and heartfelt that they really hit me, in an almost 'personal' way...if that makes sense. (Luckily, I have never had this happen to anybody close to me).
Either way, I suppose the natural thing would be to say that I am really sorry about your friend (which I am) but then, I don't think that really changes much, does it? Anyway, I wish him the best of luck, and hope he wakes up.
As for the actual poem, I think that you made a great decision in putting it in alternate rhymes (I don't know if that's what they're called...) because it added to the impact the message gave.
Aaand, I think I'm done now. I'm going to read something else of yours.
Cheers and have a good day :)

[Mikayla Rasmussen]

om gosh, thats hard to got hrough. i hope yuo r friend comes out all right. that driver should get punished for what he did

[Roxi L]

I was scared to death when my sister got hit a couple years ago. I feel the anger and pain behind the words. Nicely done!

Writing keeps the dream alive
~V~

[Sarah]

nice, you can pictuer what happend

[Becky C Strukamp]

That is so sad. The tragedy end result of someone choosing to drive while intoxicated. Prayers sent out to your friend and you.

[HeIsWe]

omg. My aunt got hit by a drunk semimdriver 2 years ago and my cousin almost died