Tears

Slowly I fall down

into this pit of darkness and despair

Starting to think I'm helpless, hopeless

why is this happening, it's not fair

 

Slowly I spiral

into the point of no return

where I'll be stuck the rest of my life

into my mind, body, and soul this feel will burn

 

no way to escape, no turning back

do I deserve this is it my fault?

it came quick, but the effects will last forever

kind of like what happens when struck by a lightning bolt

 

I'm so lost, and confused

ius there a way to relieve this pain?

will it be there forever?

will it leave a stain?

 

will there be something to protect me when I hit rock bottom

or will there be no hope, just let him go no one cares

just sit there watch, point, laugh, and stare

while the pain, right through me it tears

Author's Note

what are your thoughts

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Small miss-type in stanza four, my thoughts: emotional write and nicely written with rhyming that flows and fits so nicely, your good at that.

[Becky C Strukamp]

Thank you. Much better. I can read it perfectly now. Enjoyed your poem.

[Becky C Strukamp]

I really enjoyed your poem, however it was difficult to read with it high lighted in black. It was a great affect, just hard for ME, to read. You did a great job here.

[Day Dreamer]

Reminds me of myself in my worst times. Wonderful writing. Keep writing! :)

[Roxi L]

Reminds me of a darker part of my life... Very relatable and powerful. *tears up*

Writing keeps the dream alive
~V~

[Steph K]

There is a story in this which encompasses so much more than words can say. The ending is especially electrifying " while the pain, right through me it tears" beautiful.

[ClosedEyesOpen]

i like this but i could've done without the color background its distracting but the poem still is able to convey the emotions very well. good job

[Writing with Kae]

i like it

[kalen cms night]

awww bro you dont diserve any of it and this is very sad but i like it and final note i care :)

[Tasha]

Wow! I've felt this way before and you captured these emotions beautifully.
♥ Ta'Shandra