difused

can't handle this
for much longer
need to get my thoughts straight

some people say
that it'll make me stronger
but I'd be invincible if that were true

why can't I keep focus
my thoughts are scrambled
I don't know what to do

a little more than hocus pocus
is needed to fix this
if anything can

I don't know whats happening
I don't know what this is
I'm so confused

can't think of anything
can't think at all
my mind is diffused

Author's Note

I just wrote it enjoy :)

Reviews

[Archia]

I loved the second stanza so much, I loved it's meaning and it was all just wonderful. I enjoyed the whole meaning of this poem. I think what would help it is a bit more grammar, or really just some capital letters at the beginning would do. Nice poem.

[...]

Great poem. Really like the second graph.

[Legacy]

josh,

Thoughts infuse to dark whispers - silence! Confusion... chaos, insecurities! Maddness... words just flow while reading this piece.

A powerful stanza calls out amongst the rest:

"some people say
that it'll make me stronger
but I'd be invincible if that were true"

Strength within your words... you nailed this one.

One grammerical error, I think maybe I would fix (it just threw me off a bit):
Diffused... instead of Difused.


Keep writing!

Have a great week,

Legacy

[London]

awesome poem..i have had these thoughts myself.