Self Search

I thought this was a cool analogy to put with the way I felt

Clouds fill the sky

hiding the stars

from the earth

and it is curious

Where did they go

I want to see them

see how they luster

against the dark vast sky

Mountains destroyed

weathering and erosion

vandalizing my precious land

leaving me barren features

Corrupting from the inside out

earthquakes cracking the surface

blemishing the worthy sight

and hiding the beauty

I wonder to myself 

how am I suppose to know

what's been unclear for years

how can I know myself.

Author's Note

Sorry I didn't rhyme but I hope you enjoy it anyway.

Reviews

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Wow, this is outstanding. I cannot express how well-written this is. I totally agree with the reviews below. This does not need any rhyming. I like to rhyme but sometimes a writer needs to free style from the heart. It is amazing to see writers expressing themselves without following a particular rhyme scheme and going with the flow of their heart. Keep writing and I hope you will find yourself soon! :)

P.S.-Incredible analogy by the way!

[Deandra Dawn]

Loved it without the rhyming, I don't really rhyme in anything. Let it flow how you imagine it. Nicely done.

[Sarah]

It sounds fine without the rhyme. Amazing yet very deep

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

From your Author's Note, it doesn't need to rhyme; it was great with out it. I do like the analogy in this poem, especially the first stanza with the stars and clouds but I like how you took it further and used many more parts of the Earth.

[Lilly]

Some lovely imagery here
It's a great thought-provoking piece - and they are often the best - it's ideas staying with the reader long after they have turned the page...
Nice work

[MandaBear]

Deep very thought provoking poem. I liked it very much!

[Clairvoyant]

I like this. Simple but deep. To me it puts to face our often misunderstood connection with nature. I particularly enjoyed the last stanza.