Deep inside

sometimes I sit and think

about every little thing

is there a pattern, some kind of link

why are we here, why do we sing

I wish i could stop

Thinking only eats me away 

skip the brain and to the heart we hop

why can I not seem to keep this darkness at bay

is this world for myself

or do I belong here at all

keep it going or put my life upon the shelf

am I myself or just another little doll

keep me away

or let me stay

Author's Note

My first writing in a while wrote this in about 10 minutes. basically random thoughts. ignore mistakes

Reviews

[I Am Svetlana]

Sometimes we need to take a step back and breathe. Life can't all be easy, we must endure many struggles, but each struggle makes us stronger people in the end. We build courage, trust, insight. Every tool we need in order to live proper lives.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I know it's "basically random thoughts" from your author's note, but I really like how you wrote those thoughts down and played with them turning them into this poem. I like the chosen words you used especially in this line:
"skip the brain and to the heart we hop"

I feel like this part is easy to relate to:
" about every little thing
is there a pattern, some kind of link
why are we here, why do we sing
I wish i could stop
Thinking only eats me away"

I like the words you used here as well, describing the emotions:
"keep it going or put my life upon the shelf
am I myself or just another little doll"

And then the final two lines, nice rhyming to end it off.
Really nice write, I like the random thoughts and emotion.

[shunik]

yeah,really deep thoughts
nice write
=]

[Eloha]

This is terrific! The opening of your abstract mind here is terribly beautiful. You could easily become a writer.

[AlchemicPlutonian]

Jah killin me deep in siiide.

You've got a bit of rhythm for sure.

[AJ Kristiansen]

Well done Canicus!! I love this... it flows well and I know that's because you're a song writer so you seem to have a natural sense of rhythm. Your thoughts come together smoothly and you're dealing with what many wrestle with their whole lives! I like it a lot, well done!! :)

[A. J. Bozdar]

Dear Canicus,

In my opinion, real writing is the name of random thoughts. I really liked your random thinking. Bravo! You are doing well. I am not new to writing but feel like a new one everyday when I wake up. This is what I can say to you my friend. I wish you all the best for your all next writings.

Take care,
A

[Becky C Strukamp]

Your random thoughts blended well. Reads like one is mulling over ones life. For 10 minutes I'd say you did a great job.

[Your Perfect Disaster]

It was very thoughtful and deep. Quick rights tend to be the best because you can easily pull the emotion and heartfelt feeling out of them.

[Sarah]

I realy like it. it seems quite deep.