left behind

06/2012

yea it's okay

         she has just 

lost her way

          while I've been

searching for the 

           most unseen

 

I've been embracing

           tragedy and many pains

from many things that

            we can't conquer

one lie after another

            never a moment

of solid ground

            nor contentment 

inside out I stood

            in the devouring

flame as she fell 

upside down

             like everything

around her  

             slowly to her death

taking her love

            away from me

so very

           far away 

from me

Author's Note

Reviews

[rivers]

Ouch...if I didn't have such a good memory this poem might not hit me at such an emotional level...This form is new in your writing, at least to me and I like it. The drum beat in the song reminds me a bit of the form, in a good way.
You always seem to nail your emotions with lyrics and phrasing that draws in the reader even though the emotions are dark...Nicely done Joshua

[The Pain Stays Fresh]

It's so sad, but beautiful at the same time. It's very touching. A wonderful poem.

[Rene Velez]

sorry I took a while to review, but things have been crazy, and I won't read if it doesn't get my full attention Josh, this is a great one, I've seen a lot of growth in your work lately, I love watching...better yet reading a writer grow, good work man, keep digging...

[R.A. Youngblood]

This is dark and kinda hateful, painful, with nice imagery, nice flow and i like your font xD.. You expressed a heavy emotion here, and desperation flows in it.
Seriously, i have nothing else to say, amazing work!
Thanks for sharing..Keep it up :D

[Pax]

i really like the format that it guides a strong love for her that is very far far away. nice. keep it up

[Marissa]

This is so emotional and I love that most about it...it's great!

[Siena - Silent Awakenin..]

A very interesting write, I loved the layout... it really involved the reader, and also encouraged them to read on. Awh i loved it, write more.

[Rhea752]

This is such an emotional piece fill with hurt. Amazing job and the song was seriously great for the poem :)

[light and ashes]

A tragic poem beautifully expressed and the song was perfect for this poem. It is so important that we save the lost souls before they get to a dead end road.

[EMMIE]

Awesome! Very creative, unique and very well composed!

[Droll Prole]

Everything about this poem is awesome. The first stanza really drew me in as well.