breakthrough

06/2012

a contrast of colors grace my sight

as I wipe your murk from my eyes

am I am truly seeing for the first time 

gasping heavily,  I rip at the extensions

of your reach,  pulling myself out of

varlet mentalities and dead errors

weights slide off my back like water

while transitioning from your black

stage set to demoralize the broken

I can breathe with a smile and a sigh

the flowers reach up to me as blue

rushes to fill my once stormy gray

the sun is now shining as I walk away

birds chirp in harmony with every  

step and the breeze feels like gold

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Shelley Holt-Lowrey]

Is that you up there in this vid? What an adorable young man you are/were/are. Highly doubtful that "adorable" was the look you were going for, but as I am many years your elder I get to say it anyway. This poem of yours here - there is light and hope within which is in contrast to the dark pictures you often paint. I really appreciate all of them, but it IS nice to see a glimpse of your light every now and again. Emotive as all of your works are, but I like the strength you've found and described in this one. :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

What a great poem! I like the imagery throughout and the golden ending.

[Amila Jay]

A beautiful write :))

[Everett DeValle]

Wow, Joshua, your expressions and metaphors are simply beautiful...a lovely read and wonderful write.

[To be scene To be heard..]

this piece is one of my FAVORITES!

[Leslie Philibert]

I really like your poetry, a fine use of language, original and strong, a couple of really great metaphors like varlet mentalities or back like water.And the last lines seem to indicate a more positive view of things. Just one point that I can`t help but mention, it is from the viewpoint of someone older a shame you name yourself deathdealer. As a writer and a creative person you can`t be this, even if your themes are concerned with dark subjects...

[patricia]

feels like the light at the end of a dark tunnel. A stunning write. Loved its voice and tone. Full of hope and emerging insights. Loved it.

[Morrigan Nicole]

Very meaningful. I liked the way it ended.

[Belle]

Sleek but deep in meaning, as always!
I can sense more positivism here and
this is quite different since the words used are
bright unlike the previous pieces I've read from you.

Another excellent. You always leave ending to ponder!

[Dearantlers]

This is the first poem/story of yours that I have read, and I have to say that I'm way impressed! It was great! I loved the poem!

[Sleepless]

i love the poem and the video !the poem reminded me of when like someone takes a veil out of your eyes and seeing everything for the first time i love it 1 because you put in such a way that it was both beautiful imagery and wonderful keep writing !:)