breakthrough

06/2012

a contrast of colors grace my sight

as I wipe your murk from my eyes

am I am truly seeing for the first time 

gasping heavily,  I rip at the extensions

of your reach,  pulling myself out of

varlet mentalities and dead errors

weights slide off my back like water

while transitioning from your black

stage set to demoralize the broken

I can breathe with a smile and a sigh

the flowers reach up to me as blue

rushes to fill my once stormy gray

the sun is now shining as I walk away

birds chirp in harmony with every  

step and the breeze feels like gold

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Shelley Holt-Lowrey]

Is that you up there in this vid? What an adorable young man you are/were/are. Highly doubtful that "adorable" was the look you were going for, but as I am many years your elder I get to say it anyway. This poem of yours here - there is light and hope within which is in contrast to the dark pictures you often paint. I really appreciate all of them, but it IS nice to see a glimpse of your light every now and again. Emotive as all of your works are, but I like the strength you've found and described in this one. :)

[Ian Faraway]

The one line second stanza threw me off briefly but I enjoyed this poem. It's hopeful. The transition from dark days to the day where yyou can finally let go and move on. J'adore! -Ian

[BreeBree1983]

Amazing.. Beautiful! I love this..

[CHRIS ANDES]

good vibes of emotion =]

[Enigma]

Wonderful and refreshing. I love the use of imagery and metaphor here. A pleasure to read. :)

[M.E.Lyle]

It's always a great relief getting the weight off your back. I like the way you express yourself. You don't seem angry or too bitter, only relieved to be done with it. Great job.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A telling and touching piece, well done, good read.

[forevermore1218]

very touching and inspirational!!! I like the way you formatted every scene specifically towards the end. I like your style and hope to see more poems similar to your style.

Love your work :)

[Sleeping Maiden]

Short but such a meaningful write!!! i love the positive feel here as i read. =) it's just stunning! Amazing!

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokhar..]

Rejuvenation ! Amazing :)

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Nice music video. Love the words and descriptions in imagery you used wrapped with the feeling in this. Love this part:
"the flowers reach up to me as blue
rushes to fill my once stormy gray"