a Georgia summer

a Georgia summer

A Poem by joshua deathdealer
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05/2012

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Tripping over rows in the cotton fields, 
we ran from what everyone thought.
Our sweet teas splashing out with 
every step until we reached the huge
live oak that grew its branches out
like a green web, hiding us from the 
workers and the passersby.

The heat did nothing to subdue our
passion as we clung to each other
like it was the last time.

Maybe if we would have known that
it was the last time we would have
stayed beneath that old tree. We
probably wouldn't have ran away
from the Georgia summer rain.

Perhaps we would have embraced 
it and I could have remained in the
solace of your arms a little longer.

© 2012 joshua deathdealer


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Started out so lovely then got so sad but, thats the case for some love. You begin to let something beautiful grow against the odds and before you know it the odds catch up to you . Making you think you should have held on a little tighter. Anyways well done, the words just seem to flow as you expressed the moment through description but, never directly saying what i was.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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This filled my head and heart with pretty thoughts. Summer love, puppy love...whatever you want to call it. Your poem made me smile. :)))

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I loved this so deeply... as I made a likewise picture, you have on facebook tagged right now, what a wonderful words here. Pure bliss to follow, and feel so serene, within...

E.L.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aw! such a beautiful poem

Posted 12 Years Ago


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"We
probably wouldn't have ran away
from the Georgia summer rain."
I like the place you took me in this poem. I was station at Fort Steward, Georgia for three years. Georgia is a beautiful place. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your creation brought me to my childhood, but mine was not an old oak, but an old banyan. Superb job Joshua

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

If only we had that crystal ball that told us...to savor the moment just a little longer.. after reading this Josh... I'd stay under that tree until the grass grew around me or someone kicked me out :) I feel as though I stepped into a dream..xo

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love this much.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hindsight is where the greatest lessons are learned. I love the progression, the way this reads like a sort of monologue, the way I search for meaning in the words. It is meaningful and I like that.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is wonderful! I loved the progression of feelings and thoughts when given a glimpse of the future within. Good! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Added on May 8, 2012
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Tags: love, romance, summer

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joshua deathdealer
joshua deathdealer

Casket City, FL



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