beautiful death

beautiful death

A Poem by joshua deathdealer
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04/2012

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Oh beautiful death..
How I yearn to feel the numbing
cold that gathers at your
fingertips, brushing my feverish
skin. Quieting the painful thoughts
that eat at my mind.

Oh beautiful death..
I will remove the salt from my
doors so that you may enter
freely and grant my most  

honest request. I want
to die.

Oh beautiful death..
I am so tired. I willingly open
my heart to you.
May your darkness grow within
me so that I can choke out
all hope.

Oh beautiful death..
Bring me to my knees in prayer
for your swift coming.
Hear my cries of salvation from
the slavery of a lifetime of feeling
the hurt that surrounds me.

Oh beautiful death..
Snuff the fire from my eyes and fill
them with your blank stare.
Take away my mobility for the comfort
of being froze within your
icy embrace.

Oh beautiful death..
Wash over me and still my already labored
breath. Speed through my
veins and overcome all sources of
this cursed life. Replace my containment
with your blessed void.

© 2012 joshua deathdealer


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A powerful poem. Remind me of the old story of old. People in mourning would wish for death over life. Nice flow of thoughts in the poem. I believe if you don't like the place you are at. Move and find a place you are content. Death is a death-end street. Thank you for a outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


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a perfect opposite-beautiful and death
sounds good
=]

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is very strong, very dark, but very gentle in my mind. :) It's beautiful!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This holds within it so much power that ripples with every word. It is such a happy poem, when you really think of it. If life is truely that hard for someone, would it not be a happy thing for them to be relieved of their problems?

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amazing, powerful.. Beautiful! It makes your heart ache to the point of holding yourself, you really feel this one.. I love this..

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I understand that in great sadness death can give a compelling case. This is well written and so deeply sad. But death is never beautiful, you are not left behind to enjoy its scars heaped upon those who once loved or cared for you. There is no beauty in this, only loss. And with death you cannot punish those who may have forsaken you. Their pain does not outweigh yours. And it comes as no relief to them either. You are just gone. The joke is on you.

Good write...disturbing thoughts...but always freedom to say what you will.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is a well written piece which totally angers me. finding death inviting is a luxury of the young and a hope to the terminally ill. there is nothing noble in inviting death. it is a coward's exit. when death comes knocking on my door i will gladly send him to someone who is looking to welcome him.

now that i've purged that from my system, you are a very good writer. i realize that poetry is not always literal and i may have over-reacted to a metaphorical piece. we all want the end of conflict and pain and you have expressed that extremely well here. i look forward to reading more of your work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really appreciate this piece. I relate very well to the words that portray a desire to just be taken away. I appreciate your emotions that you put into this write. Thank you for sharing! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You have suceeded in bringing me close to tears with the beauty and the pain expressed in this!!!!! Wonderfully written and the message is quite understandable as well. Gorgeous!!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is so deep and i can relate

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

a melodic wish...spoken like a prayer, that only death himself can hear.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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joshua deathdealer
joshua deathdealer

Casket City, FL



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