daydream

01/2012

I've pushed through the weeping branches

that grow out of the foliage surrounding your heart, 

I've stood among the yellow aspens and red maples 

that grow within our dusty memories, 

from time to time I've walked the beaten paths 

winding to and from certain moments

portrayed on these frayed pages, 

hoping to catch a glimpse of you, in a memory perhaps

somewhere forgotten, 

I will wait for you

Author's Note

Thanks to Emily Burns for helping with the format.

Reviews

[Tristan]

The imagery your words evoke is simply delightful: they have lots of texture, and the sound of nature with them. You use words in a deceptively simple way and it shows no sign of forced appearance; everything fits. I do believe, however, that this poem could benefit from being broke up - all of the commas and no periods to break it into sentences makes you feel as if you have to read it all in one breath. But other than that, wonderful work.

[turning violet]

Beautiful! 0_0

[Coyote Poetry]

The photo and the words create a nice vision of hope and wishes. A walk into a familiar place allow thoughts to wander to better days and places. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

Beautiful work; it really sucks you in. The images are captivating and they flow together perfectly. I do agree with Tristan that more punctuation would be nice, especially towards the end. To some extent, though, I liked how it was all connected and I think that style fit with the title...

[emmajoy]

Your words paint the picture above .. make it more than three dimensional because you've given it emotional shadows. The poem is rich and colourful, has sensitivity, heart .. that to me, makes it sigh, waiting happily.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I love the imagery in this piece. This piece was really sweet. I could relate as well. I loved the piece. It does have a beauty to it and picture went really nicely with it. This was also powerful to me. Thank you for sharing. :D

[Matt "Mickey" Denney]

Very relating write. It matches my current mood. Awesome :)

[Tim Lion]

Good stuff. you have a distinct gift for vivid description. I like it.

[tk]

there's the feeling of quietude as i walk alone a path with tall trees and dried leaves are falling. the way you captured this moment is astounding. the way you described this distant memory is exceptional.. :) thanks for sharing!! ^_^
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[Warren L.G De Mills]

Nice piece! good job with good description. I really felt it there! good write!

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

One of your best and nature poems are my favorite! Great job!