holes

12/2011

In despair I felt the place of my death in there

Without despair I have known this place as life

How I miss living there yet still I hold you, 

Here, now, just as beautiful as ever before

Untarnished in my heart even after all the

trials, still full of youthful endearment 

My heart sings as if this were our first touch

A realization that that never gets old

I could step through these holes eternally,

dancing away from the light, creating worlds

Of course I am dreaming, whittling away

at the building blocks cluttering my mind

 

     

Author's Note

Super Paper Mario actually inspired this..xx

Reviews

[SkinlessFrank]

I like the way this poem sits almost entirely within the mind, as if one were in the state between waking and sleep when our the regrets and high points of one's life float through thoughts, connected and unconnected, the pain and pleasure all there to be observed but no way to act upon it.

[Krimson]

i like how yu see beauty within darkness,, it makes me feel like im not alone in tht state of matter, i like it .. it takes true talnet and special eyes to see a hallow light shinning in darkness.. people that think like that are truely beautiful, their mind ismore opened to the world.. people that think like that has less fears in the world than the others. i enjoy your work an i will keep great update of them (:

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Great poem. I liked this piece. I love how Super Paper Mario inspired this o.o...I know I'm going to remember this piece. I love the picture it made me smile. Hehe thank you for sharing. :3

[EMF]

Beautiful and striking. Throughly breathtaking in all respects. The sort of work that leaves your head reeling afterwards.

[ChaoticSoul]

That is an awesome image you used. And your ability to weave death, clarity, and beauty all together still astounds me. You connect it all so much to your writing and prove your understanding of it all quite professionally. I especially like in this poem how you relate it to the empty holes life and love can create. Very nice writing.

[Kim's Poems]

Very awesome and dark, love it

[realmwriter]

My Brother plays that on his laptop. Nicely done deathdealer. Kinda thought it was about your Daughter...! Great Job.

What a deep contrast to display, the real dual in reality. I think this is a wonderful piece, because I recognize it ... in a place, where you hated all, but at the same time loved it, and it's a part of you. It's a very nice set up, love your work!

I came back again Josh.... my meanind didn't changed after two years, it's you that are a channel of brilliance.....

*meaning.... ;)

[Kenneth The Poet]

Intense read. I like it. The picture at the end summarizes it well.

[Muse]

A realization that that never gets old

double that? xo

Of course I am dreaming, whittling away
at the building blocks cluttering my mind

the imagery..with your words...very clever.