you should have known better

11/2011 (Blood type B: Installment Eight)

I have stormed these halls more days

     than most have ever seen

Years have blended together into

     a long, blood soaked night

Keen to replace the soul of

     a beloved mortal that died before her time 

     I remember the day her hand 

slipped from mine and she rose above the sky

    Leaving me alone and forsaken on this doomed plane

Here I have lain in wait for someone

    Anyone that bears her similar presence

Many have came and fell into my treacherous traps

I would give anything to just be dead

    To awaken from this gray fog that hangs

overhead, however this is just a inanimate dream for me

    So I will drink what is left of your precious time

swallowing, greedily, all your sticky hopes for a brighter tomorrow

    I will take my vengefulness out on the pulsing vein

    that graces the lengths of your throat

Give to me your lifeline and partake in my immortality

    Find in me your deepest and darkest desires   

Don't be afraid of your destiny, embrace this chance

    This accident that is soon to befall you

Lay in my anesthetic hold, forever close your eyes

    

Author's Note

Reviews

[Kaylor Mason]

I love how this could be a destructive relationship of a human seducer/womanizer with a girl, enslaved to his own lust--not merely just vampire lust. It applies to real life as well as fiction. A lot of guys chase after affairs to fill up some void in their lives, as they walk around through empty, gray existences; that's why a true womanizer is, quite literally, a cold-hearted psychopathic "vampire," sucking the love out of others and never able to return it--they've lost the ability to truly love someone. The darkness of this piece isn't really vampiric--it mirrors a human heart. That's why it's so good

[BreeBree1983]

Very well said..

[Priscilla Sayers]

Sorrowful and passionate. A predator coaxing his prey to come in closer within his reach. Spellbinding as I found myself drawn in by the dark lullaby of your words.

[roarke]

you are developing a good handle on the idea of it's not just the words, it's what you say with them. You create good images, and then take them someplace, do something with them, evolve them throughout the write. This is what writing is about. Let these pieces set for a while and then come back to them days or weeks later and see how they sound to you and what you might add or subtract etc. Keep telling the story, your prose will take care of itself. Good stuff.

[Draven]

Dude, this is so good. You write some of the best stuff ever.

[M.E.Lyle]

I agree with EMF. I'm not a big vampire Twilight fan, but this was true emotion, love, and anything else that I can't think of just now. Great work.

[Lily Mae]

"So I will drink what is left of your precious time
swallowing, greedily, all your sticky hopes for a brighter tomorrow
I will take my vengefulness out on the pulsing vein"

Wow.. I love this installment.. and it's on fire...xx

[Arabdha]

wow !! loved the piece ..

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Good one..!!

[EMF]

Vampires. Neck Biters. Do you know how many people actually write decent stuff about the leeches? WC is swarming with rudy Twilight clones. Dross and teen-porn. But you... You write what is effectivkey a love poem to a dead love. As powerful as Poe and as emotive as Stoker. A superb write with depth and feeling A great work that I hope will be recognised as such against the Twilight Brigade and their sweet, pretty neck biters. Wonderful work my friend. Beautiful flow and imagry, with a style all of its own. Id give it much more than 100 if the box would let me.

[Thea]

Excellent work, Joshua...
I somewhat missed reading your poems...
You never fail the readers...
Well done! :)))

[Aidz]

dripping with intent on that last line :)