you should have known better

11/2011 (Blood type B: Installment Eight)

I have stormed these halls more days

     than most have ever seen

Years have blended together into

     a long, blood soaked night

Keen to replace the soul of

     a beloved mortal that died before her time 

     I remember the day her hand 

slipped from mine and she rose above the sky

    Leaving me alone and forsaken on this doomed plane

Here I have lain in wait for someone

    Anyone that bears her similar presence

Many have came and fell into my treacherous traps

I would give anything to just be dead

    To awaken from this gray fog that hangs

overhead, however this is just a inanimate dream for me

    So I will drink what is left of your precious time

swallowing, greedily, all your sticky hopes for a brighter tomorrow

    I will take my vengefulness out on the pulsing vein

    that graces the lengths of your throat

Give to me your lifeline and partake in my immortality

    Find in me your deepest and darkest desires   

Don't be afraid of your destiny, embrace this chance

    This accident that is soon to befall you

Lay in my anesthetic hold, forever close your eyes

    

Author's Note

Reviews

[Kaylor Mason]

I love how this could be a destructive relationship of a human seducer/womanizer with a girl, enslaved to his own lust--not merely just vampire lust. It applies to real life as well as fiction. A lot of guys chase after affairs to fill up some void in their lives, as they walk around through empty, gray existences; that's why a true womanizer is, quite literally, a cold-hearted psychopathic "vampire," sucking the love out of others and never able to return it--they've lost the ability to truly love someone. The darkness of this piece isn't really vampiric--it mirrors a human heart. That's why it's so good

[BreeBree1983]

Very well said..

[BreeBree1983]

Powerful, passionate, dark.. Love this one quite a lot.. Favorite part: " So I will drink what is left of your precious time
swallowing, greedily, all your sticky hopes for a brighter tomorrow
I will take my vengefulness out on the pulsing vein
that graces the lengths of your throat"

[devon]

Oh, how dark!

While I don't usually care for such dark kinds of writing, this was very well written and very beautiful.

:)

[TaylorH'sPoems]

love this!

[Matt "Mickey" Denney]

I am not extremely educated in this sort of writing but I do know that I enjoyed it and how it wasn't a mainstream type of writing. I like the originality that you have incorporated into this piece. Awesome!

[Layla J Omorose]

I loved this. Though I don't know if this is a poem or story... though I think it works both ways. I have read my share of vampire stories, there are so many of them out there that most stories have become repeateative especially if it pertains to vampires in a high school setting. Twilight basically killed my like for vampires. But that's neither here nor there. This was very good and has me wondering exactly what is next or if there is going to be another part. If so I hope you do not fall into the same category of vampire stories that are lurking out there. This was very good I look forward to another part.

[Jadey]

you just brought me into mystery. genius..

[S. Michael Long]

I love this poem, i realize its not about what i relate it to.. but its brilliant! while reading it it reminded me of an opium tea addiction i once had.. brilliant write! -s

[Octob3r Star]

You can see through this writing. Into the heart-felt genius that is behind the eyes of the writer. Great job. Cheers!

[Larry Dyson]

shows the contrast between then...5 months ago..and now..