the honorable knight

11/2011 (Fantasy Installment Three)

He walked among the horrific battlefield,

taking in sights of body strewn stretches

as far as the eye could see, a war in the 

name of some decree from some greedy king

His brothers called to him, ready to celebrate 

another victory, to mull through the spoils 

of conquest, taking from the helpless and the weak,

to humiliate and rob them of mere possessions

Shaking his head, the knight silently strode away

from the massacre, making his way into the

quiet forest, the order was not being followed,

carnage now the corrupter of honor and chivalry  

Screams sounded close by, upon investigation

he could see a belligerent solider of the

crown dragging a vulnerable dame into the 

thicket to have his way with her

Rushing in, he knocked the assailant off of her

and pulled his sword, snickering the crazed 

man stood pulling his own, lifting it high, he charged

at the steady savior, intent on cutting him down

The honorable knight side stepped and stabbed 

his opponent through the chest, sinking the hilt

all the way through before tearing it out, the

deranged man dropped lifelessly to the foliage 

Looking around the victor could see the forms 

of his once so called brothers creeping toward him, 

in response he raised a long forgotten battle cry, 

"We are knights of the order, honor is our life"  

Author's Note

I think honor and integrity are becoming a thing of the past. How different this world would be if we had some men to stand up for what is right. Just a thought concerning the moral of this story. Thanks for the reviews and support..xx

Reviews

^_^ another fantasy poem, if we share nothing else we definitely have the same admiration for vivid imaginative works that derive from the Fantasy genre.
As for honor and integrity becoming something at the brink of extinction, I'd would just have to say it isn't televised that much, so it's pretty much left for the free-thinking people to carry it on :p

Now as for the poem, I love the classic battlefield style... gives me a sense of watching Braveheart all over again lol. It's got some nice imagery points that were really much better towards stanza 4 and on. Some extension on terminology could've been used I find, though even though a basic one was kept thoughout, it never affected the tone. The overall moral and theme of the story was fantastic, and it's waved like a banner of strength at the end of the poem.
Now to be a bit constructive: I don't know if you heard of this before, but one thing that really works especially in the type of poetry you're writing here is "Kennings". look it up when you have the chance. It's a type of technique that's very similar to metaphors but it's pretty much basically a phrase which represents an alternative name for something else. I've expressed concern similar to this in another poem of yours that was about an arrogant mage, forgive me if I seem repetitive, but simply trying to help you. it's just simple care free advice so feel free to pick it up with a grain of salt I guess...
Also, the beat/rhythm was a bit off here compared to your other poems (specifically stanza 2, and I suspect it because of comma placements). Everyone has their days though... it can be a little troubling at times to keep a good steady vibe throughout even I find. Also, there's a bit of an error in line 4 of stanza 3 with "corrupter"... perhaps you meant: "corrupter of" or "corrupting"... simple grammar error, no worries :p
Overall, 94/100, awesome work bro. Enjoyed it. Keep on spitting on this awesome work yo. You gettin more beast at dis everyday, got the next Tolkien coming up on our hands lol

Great description, very compelling. I would love to read more about the honorable Knight. :)

[Eric Cox]

Excellent write! Love the medieval theme. Nicely done!

[Adora.xo]

Beautifully written. Your diction is flawless, and the descriptions make me ache. I do find that integrity and honor and even morals are becoming a thing of the past, they are becoming more and more forgotten, and it is --to say the least-- very sad to see. The story you paint with your words is brilliant, I myself am a hopeless romantic so I was right up in there with the knight in shining armor saving the dame, and I absolutely LOVED it! The last line drove home the point, and painted an even more vivid image in my head of the lone warrior fighting for honor against the hundreds who've lost all morals in the midst of war. Brilliant job Joshua! I enjoyed this poem very much =]

~Rose

[Kenneth The Poet]

This reminds me of the last season of Sons of Anarchy I watched. Honor means everything to that gang.

[realmwriter]

And so honor is found here all be it at the end. Nicely done!

[EMMIE]

TRUE. THOUGHT PROVOKING. LOVE THE STORY.

[∂αʌ<..]

amazing tribute i would say! :D

[Draven]

Thats like, awsome dude. And that was a great write. Nice work. And its very true. Honor is a long forgotten word. Hey, if you want, watch the Last Samurai.

[BeccaB]

a very nice poem well done