the arrogant mage

11/2011 (Fantasy Installment Two)

The shadowy clouds that gathered above

matched the heart of the young man

that rode a hellish steed, expeditiously 

towards the impending and soaring citadel

He had studied long and laboriously in

consideration of this glorious day, he 

had ruthlessly murdered countless clergy  

in order to absorb enough spiritual essence 

To ascend to the level of the most high

gods, to return and reign over this lowly

world with superiority and fear, laughter bursts

out as he makes his way to the massive entrance

This was his destiny, pushing open the door

he walks in whistling a favorite tune, in the

center of the room was a perfectly square

mirror, no reflection just murky silvery swirls

His black mantle flutters as he rushes to the

ethereal gateway, a monk stands up from

the tables that surrounds the speculum in an

effort to stop the dark wizard's advancement 

Lightning stabs through the walls and strikes

the ill fated servant, thunder follows as he 

falls to the floor and the arrogant mage steps

over the smoking body to stands before the portal

Lifting his arms upward, he commands that

the gods receive him into their divine dimension

and grant him the powers that he so rightfully deserves,

a huge hand reaches out and squashes him like a bug

Author's Note

"Pride goeth before destruction, and an haughty spirit before a fall."

Reviews

[Nobody.]

Really enjoyed. I'm a sucker for a horse and sword story of any kind, especially when there's magic afoot. Really nice imagery, and foreshadowing. The only constructive crit I can offer is that in the last line of stanza five....there should be an apostraphe on "dark wizard's advancement." just a typo. Kickass poem dude.
Cheers!

[J.V. Stanley]

Wow, this is fantastic! Amazing imagery and such an amazing story with such climactic ending. That as boastful as one can be, as haughty in attitude when they look down upon those unfortunate, of those who are in their eyes 'less than', they find out eventually that they are no better than the rest of us.

Though it reads more like prose to me than poetry, I did enjoy the breaks in between-it would truly be epic to add rhymes within it but honestly that would be more fun than anything-the way it stands now is perfect and I probably wouldn't change a thing. The story line reads like an epic saga with moralistic views that catch us in the end (or rather catches the antagonist in the end). Magnificent write! Detailed and delightful.

[roarke]

So Willy Shakespeare and Nostradamus walk into a bar and decide to collaborate on writing the sequel to Tolkien's LOTR........ gotta love quatrains. Good stuff, keep going.

[Lily Mae]

This is phenomenal.. You are so descriptive that I felt as though I was walking inside your minds eye with this one.. Love it Josh..x

[Yuan]

When Zelda meet Dragonlance and Dungeons and Dragons? =)

[Larry Dyson]

YES...........completly.....your forshadowing made me want that ending..well written.