the arrogant mage

11/2011 (Fantasy Installment Two)

The shadowy clouds that gathered above

matched the heart of the young man

that rode a hellish steed, expeditiously 

towards the impending and soaring citadel

He had studied long and laboriously in

consideration of this glorious day, he 

had ruthlessly murdered countless clergy  

in order to absorb enough spiritual essence 

To ascend to the level of the most high

gods, to return and reign over this lowly

world with superiority and fear, laughter bursts

out as he makes his way to the massive entrance

This was his destiny, pushing open the door

he walks in whistling a favorite tune, in the

center of the room was a perfectly square

mirror, no reflection just murky silvery swirls

His black mantle flutters as he rushes to the

ethereal gateway, a monk stands up from

the tables that surrounds the speculum in an

effort to stop the dark wizard's advancement 

Lightning stabs through the walls and strikes

the ill fated servant, thunder follows as he 

falls to the floor and the arrogant mage steps

over the smoking body to stands before the portal

Lifting his arms upward, he commands that

the gods receive him into their divine dimension

and grant him the powers that he so rightfully deserves,

a huge hand reaches out and squashes him like a bug

Author's Note

"Pride goeth before destruction, and an haughty spirit before a fall."

Reviews

[Nobody.]

Really enjoyed. I'm a sucker for a horse and sword story of any kind, especially when there's magic afoot. Really nice imagery, and foreshadowing. The only constructive crit I can offer is that in the last line of stanza five....there should be an apostraphe on "dark wizard's advancement." just a typo. Kickass poem dude.
Cheers!

[adam]

love the ending

[Coyote Poetry]

The ending made the story complete. When we think we are God's. We will fall down very quickly and painful like in the poem. I like how you create a man with great goals and arrogant dreams. A perfect ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Rene Velez]

cool write with great images, the story is awesome, and what an ending, bravo Josh

[sharonlee]

Epic

[Hayley]

Wow, you are really good at this type of writing! Such imagination, but it's different. Keep 'em coming!!

[Audrey Howitt]

Unexpected ending! This reads so much like a story to me---Now i need to go back and see if I can find the first installment

[Kenneth The Poet]

This reminds me of Highlander so much. The battle scenes between Ramirez and the Kurgen and that final showdown between McLeod and the Kurgen. Excellent piece, brother.

[InkSlinger]

Always an enjoyable read.. and such a wonderful imagination!!

[Jazique]

Wow its like a story in a poet way with so many interesting descriptions creating so many images that lead to action and mystery like a scifi. Anyways well done with this poem and nice saying as pride falls descruction dose come as your spirit the same.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

wow!
you've got quite an imagination!