murder death kill

10/2011 (Blood type B: Installment Five)

"187"

He spoke nervously into his two way

as he walked up to the lifeless body

that lay twisted on the dirt road.

The gore that surrounded her was

illuminated by his vehicle's headlights.

Looking, he could see that her

throat appeared to have been 

ripped out or cut. Blood still

gushed out the fatal wound,

flowing in the dusty tire tracks.

"187"

"I repeat. I gotta 187, white female

out here on old wire road. It's 

pretty bad. Requesting backup.." the

young policeman says as he turns back 

towards his patrol car. Three feet in 

front of him stood a person.

A man. His clothes were torn and 

he was not seemingly shaken by the 

extreme cold. Unshaven and disheveled.

Blood covered mouth.  "Oh my God" was 

all the rookie managed to say while trying 

to raise his gun.

As he attempts to train his sights, he is 

slammed to the ground. Knocking out his breath.

Flailing around, his arms are pushed back by 

the savage man. He feels the killers teeth sinking 

into his throbbing throat. Pain explodes and

claustrophobia. Causing him to pass out.

Awaking, he realizes the psychopath is 

gulping the red, bubbling flow that pours 

from his neck. Struggling in panic, he pushes 

back at the assailant. The attacker screeches.

Grabs the lawman's head and smashes it repeatedly on 

the lime rock. After licking at the stickiness on his 

fingers the deranged man stands up and walks off 

into the trees.

"235 do you copy. Come in 235"

 

Author's Note

I took a different approach to this one. Put more of a story tale style into this fifth installment of the series. Less emotional and more gore. lol

Reviews

[Dahlia Phoenix]

Wow, this was purely dark and terrorizing. This simple man is calling out for help but instead gets taken down by the killer as well with no hope of his whereabouts being found. In a way, its really sad but in another matter, the description was clarifying what you wanted to point out.

[EMMIE]

WELL THIS POEM COULD VERY WELL BE A SCENE FROM A MOVIE...LIKE THE TWILIGHT OR SOME HORROR HALLOWEEN MOVIE. BUT THIS IS VERY WELL WRITTEN AND IT DEF KEPT ME ON EDGE FROM BEGINNING TO END. I GET BORED VERY QUICKLY BUT SINCE YOU CAUGHT MY ATTENTION FROM THE VERY BEGINNING I DECIDED TO KEEP ON READING JUST TO SEE WHAT HAPPENS NEXT. GREAT WRITE!

[Chris]

Not sure if this makes me creepy but I appreciate the added gore and less story-telling . It certainly worked out well for this piece. I love the ending, how it leaves the reading hanging on dramatic irony.