murder death kill

10/2011 (Blood type B: Installment Five)

"187"

He spoke nervously into his two way

as he walked up to the lifeless body

that lay twisted on the dirt road.

The gore that surrounded her was

illuminated by his vehicle's headlights.

Looking, he could see that her

throat appeared to have been 

ripped out or cut. Blood still

gushed out the fatal wound,

flowing in the dusty tire tracks.

"187"

"I repeat. I gotta 187, white female

out here on old wire road. It's 

pretty bad. Requesting backup.." the

young policeman says as he turns back 

towards his patrol car. Three feet in 

front of him stood a person.

A man. His clothes were torn and 

he was not seemingly shaken by the 

extreme cold. Unshaven and disheveled.

Blood covered mouth.  "Oh my God" was 

all the rookie managed to say while trying 

to raise his gun.

As he attempts to train his sights, he is 

slammed to the ground. Knocking out his breath.

Flailing around, his arms are pushed back by 

the savage man. He feels the killers teeth sinking 

into his throbbing throat. Pain explodes and

claustrophobia. Causing him to pass out.

Awaking, he realizes the psychopath is 

gulping the red, bubbling flow that pours 

from his neck. Struggling in panic, he pushes 

back at the assailant. The attacker screeches.

Grabs the lawman's head and smashes it repeatedly on 

the lime rock. After licking at the stickiness on his 

fingers the deranged man stands up and walks off 

into the trees.

"235 do you copy. Come in 235"

 

Author's Note

I took a different approach to this one. Put more of a story tale style into this fifth installment of the series. Less emotional and more gore. lol

Reviews

[Dahlia Phoenix]

Wow, this was purely dark and terrorizing. This simple man is calling out for help but instead gets taken down by the killer as well with no hope of his whereabouts being found. In a way, its really sad but in another matter, the description was clarifying what you wanted to point out.

[Alexandria Reece]

This kept me interested the whole time, I love how you didn't overdo it allowing for a powerful effect. It created an extremely vivid picture in my mind and it made me want to read more of your work (which is a huge accomplishment for writers I think, as you have many works to share and interesting the reader to explore is vital. The accomplishment obviously not being interesting me as an individual, but as a general reader... wanted to get that clear so I didn't come across as some pompous rubbish bin to you). Lovely and lip licking(ly) bloody goodness, thank you for sharing!

[Inyourshadow]

MDK loved that game lol, seriously though this is a twist in the tale, as what seems to be the end of him is only the new beginning. Love that idea, licking sticky fingers nice image and one to reel in the readers. keep em' coming

[Andrea Vargas]

I am so engulfed in your words, you speak with a terroizing maddness that creeps up my spine. Fantastic job

[Rene Velez]

creepy write, but good and gory

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! A wonderful short story! Scary!

[Muse]

Perfect for the month of October.... Trick or Treat! xo

[turning violet]

nice..
more?

[InkSlinger]

The thing I love most about writing (and reading).. it the power it has to take you on a journey, picking you up, and carrying you along the path the writer has loosely laid before you. A good writer relays the story firsthand, a great writer sells you the ticket, and allows you to SEE the story first hand.. You are a great writer!!

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

A lotta gore here...
But the descriptions are good.

[Desmund Tiny]

wow... a dark poem and I love it... it reminds me one of my favorite gore oneshot manga.... and the flow of the story in poem is great