murder death kill

10/2011 (Blood type B: Installment Five)

"187"

He spoke nervously into his two way

as he walked up to the lifeless body

that lay twisted on the dirt road.

The gore that surrounded her was

illuminated by his vehicle's headlights.

Looking, he could see that her

throat appeared to have been 

ripped out or cut. Blood still

gushed out the fatal wound,

flowing in the dusty tire tracks.

"187"

"I repeat. I gotta 187, white female

out here on old wire road. It's 

pretty bad. Requesting backup.." the

young policeman says as he turns back 

towards his patrol car. Three feet in 

front of him stood a person.

A man. His clothes were torn and 

he was not seemingly shaken by the 

extreme cold. Unshaven and disheveled.

Blood covered mouth.  "Oh my God" was 

all the rookie managed to say while trying 

to raise his gun.

As he attempts to train his sights, he is 

slammed to the ground. Knocking out his breath.

Flailing around, his arms are pushed back by 

the savage man. He feels the killers teeth sinking 

into his throbbing throat. Pain explodes and

claustrophobia. Causing him to pass out.

Awaking, he realizes the psychopath is 

gulping the red, bubbling flow that pours 

from his neck. Struggling in panic, he pushes 

back at the assailant. The attacker screeches.

Grabs the lawman's head and smashes it repeatedly on 

the lime rock. After licking at the stickiness on his 

fingers the deranged man stands up and walks off 

into the trees.

"235 do you copy. Come in 235"

 

Author's Note

I took a different approach to this one. Put more of a story tale style into this fifth installment of the series. Less emotional and more gore. lol

Reviews

[Dahlia Phoenix]

Wow, this was purely dark and terrorizing. This simple man is calling out for help but instead gets taken down by the killer as well with no hope of his whereabouts being found. In a way, its really sad but in another matter, the description was clarifying what you wanted to point out.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Loved the gore. It would be hard for any newbie to deal with that. Then he was killed himself. I loved the change in direction as well. Makes it more interesting. I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing.

[realmwriter]

The change of direction and style is rather abrupt. I was just starting to get into the gore... Nicely done though

[SUGATA M]

What a storyline, seems out of the world, J you are a marvellously mysterious story teller.

[Angel Bluestocking]

Savage, fearful and vivid.
The detail of the hunt is superb!

[roarke]

I like all of your chapters, they give a very inside view of this "being"/vampire/blood drinker.... there is contemplation of the first person narrator, there is evolution in the feelings, and there is thematic imagery.
For some reason though, Murder Death Kill, reveals "a man" as the outside embodiment of the narrator, or is at least suggested. After reading all the installments, I don't see this entity as "just a man" even to a beat cop, with his mind on a gruesome murder. It seems more like this man is just a "copy cat" murderer if you will. In other words, at first and only sight to a revealed conscious of a mortal victim, it is very strange that the narrator is just "a man" I think even ordinary people might sense something more.
Just my take. Nice job on the series of prose.

[Ruth]

Ooohhh, got the chills with this one love! I love this series of works actually...this one stands out differently, different stance and chaotic madness amidst thrilling and frightening depths, love it! xoxo

[Jeremy Baker]

This narrative reads more like a story, but loses none of its punch for all that. Quite innovative.

[Forgotten]

wow that was ....wow

[Dr. S. D. Blankenship D..]

murder death kill
A Story by joshua deathdealer
Ah, the long forgotten patrol stories are so great. :) I love that her throat was "ripped or cut".
So, the last sentence he's drinking his own blood? O.o Hm, cool. This is outstanding!
O.o I am subscribing.

~S. D. Blankenship

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

creepy and dark I liked it