nightlife

10/2011

We swirl among the blinking lights.

Moving as one, feeding off one another.

Dancing like stars on a cloudy night.

The beat pushes the smoky haze

that has gathered above us. Our

shattered hearts mend from relief.

Moving for the refreshing change

from the daily hassle and the pain

that holds us stagnate. 

Tears stream down the faces of

the hopeful while we that know

better settle for lustful dry eyes.

Our energies entwine, empowering

us into euphoria. We may have fallen

but never will we be forgotten. 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Pratik]

Very well written! Not going by the title of the poem, I think it stands for all kind of activities that we delve into to cut ourselves out from the daily monotone. The people we meet in course, range from being overemotional to emotionally dried up(as per the second last stanza) and relationships here can be forgotten as soon as they are formed. This is my interpretation of course. But the poem is nicely composed. I like the last stanza specially! Very subtle.. :)

[EMF]

To be honest, the lines I could read were wonderfully constructed. Conjuring up images that left be entranced. Unfortunatley I'm profoundly colourblind, and have cataracts to boot, meanning I missed every other line. I can't comment upon the entire poem. Only your writing style, which is hypnotic. It draws you in and sparks ideas in your head. Just a few words can trigger so much. Many thanks for posting it. My issues do not effect your rating.

[Judas Hammer]

very nice. I like the color it added the the vision, I pictured the lights outside a strip club or seedy bar. The poem dope. The words seems to come alive and almost seemed as if they were being whispered in some ones ear. Very nice

[Casper]

"We may have fallen
but never will we be forgotten. "

I got the biggest goosebumps reading that last line. Beautiful.
I really enjoyed your poem :)

[taylorrose]

never had a night life but from your poem i can see its very sweet. thank you for sharing it with me

[Kenneth The Poet]

Very trance. The colors make me think that this was inspired by a rave, minus the Ecstasy of course. Nice work. The last stanza, succinct and heartfelt.

[Thea]

"We may have fallen
but never will we be forgotten. "
Waahh...Wonderful piece, Joshua! I like the flow from one line to another...Enjoyed this much! :)))

[Amila Jay]

Super write, i can just the imagine the picture:)

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Lovely..!!!!!!