nightlife

10/2011

We swirl among the blinking lights.

Moving as one, feeding off one another.

Dancing like stars on a cloudy night.

The beat pushes the smoky haze

that has gathered above us. Our

shattered hearts mend from relief.

Moving for the refreshing change

from the daily hassle and the pain

that holds us stagnate. 

Tears stream down the faces of

the hopeful while we that know

better settle for lustful dry eyes.

Our energies entwine, empowering

us into euphoria. We may have fallen

but never will we be forgotten. 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Pratik]

Very well written! Not going by the title of the poem, I think it stands for all kind of activities that we delve into to cut ourselves out from the daily monotone. The people we meet in course, range from being overemotional to emotionally dried up(as per the second last stanza) and relationships here can be forgotten as soon as they are formed. This is my interpretation of course. But the poem is nicely composed. I like the last stanza specially! Very subtle.. :)

Truly beautiful my friend... how do I like the words you use, into this poem. I felt swollowed up, couldn't stop reading, that's poetry for me... thanks. xx

[Lily Mae]

A very seductive write. As you wrote on I was being drawn into your words and then the last stanza nails it...xo Love it..x

[Muse]

The picture, the font, the word play, all of this provided art for the eyes. And of course, your words are like a powerful energy....always leaving the reader begging for more. xo

[Dahlia Phoenix]

The colors are vibrant when reading this piece of work.

"Moving for the refreshing change
from the daily hassle and the pain
that holds us stagnate."

This was my favorite stanza just by how easily it flows when I read it.

[savine allen aka breezy]

Awsome love it keep up the good work cant wait to read more from u

[InkSlinger]

Dance the night away bro.. leave the worries at the door, and clear your head on the floor.. dance, dance, dance..

[Inyourshadow]

Dancing like clouds - love the imagery of this thought, the light airy feeling it offers. You approached this tenderly and succeeded in leaving one sighing. Just one thing the colours hurt my eyes has suffer migraines, not a criticism just saying. Keep em' coming

[Crow]

This is an awesome bit of imagery and feeling, spoken with a sense of truthful observation. At first I thought the colors would detract from the writing, but I soon finished reading and realized I had not even noticed the colors.

I truthfully like this poem, well done!

[Audrey Howitt]

Creative use of color to effect neon--nice write as well--I love the last stanza.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

I like the lovely wording in this poem.
:)