nightlife

10/2011

We swirl among the blinking lights.

Moving as one, feeding off one another.

Dancing like stars on a cloudy night.

The beat pushes the smoky haze

that has gathered above us. Our

shattered hearts mend from relief.

Moving for the refreshing change

from the daily hassle and the pain

that holds us stagnate. 

Tears stream down the faces of

the hopeful while we that know

better settle for lustful dry eyes.

Our energies entwine, empowering

us into euphoria. We may have fallen

but never will we be forgotten. 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Pratik]

Very well written! Not going by the title of the poem, I think it stands for all kind of activities that we delve into to cut ourselves out from the daily monotone. The people we meet in course, range from being overemotional to emotionally dried up(as per the second last stanza) and relationships here can be forgotten as soon as they are formed. This is my interpretation of course. But the poem is nicely composed. I like the last stanza specially! Very subtle.. :)

[∂αʌ<..]

wow...the font you used bring this disco lights graphic images and even if we can imagine the people dancing as thought knowing each other, yet they are lost themselves...lost in an unknown world!
great!

[Chris Taylor]

This speaks of a deeper meaning to walking through life like a zombie; not being engaged in the joy of one's own life. I really liked this one. Keep up the excellent work.

[Aidz]

Dude the colours!!!!!!

Mmm read the pink lines, then I read the green lines mmmm then I read them both

sweet

[Daytonight]

Love the font and style, especially the alternating colors. Great write! Keep on penning.

Let's see...
First review, so a little new to this, so take light, alight? ^_^ :p
New to the format/style, and have to say, you do a fair well job of empowering the electric feel of a club with the colors of the font used. I do very much enjoy that, definitely note-worthy ;)
The theme of the poem seems a bit twisted to what a club-themed poem should inspire I would think, which would be up-beat, sweaty, and in the groove. But, it's most certainly not a flaw I'm calling out here, just a thought being considered as I write this review.
What I'm guessing is this poem is more about the idea of going "catting" or "hawking" (whatever term is more appropriate) after love has deceived someone, and now they're looking for one night stands to amend a heart left broken.
^_^; I'm hoping I'm judging this well, Idk if I'm all that good at this.
I would give criticism if it was needed, but if this poem was meant for how I'm perceiving it as being, I say it's a job well done.
100/100

[patricia]

A quite deep poem especially the line...lustful dry eyes. thankyou.

[Rene Velez]

beautiful and colorful, this is awesome...

[Wolf's Dark Song]

A very impressive poem, swirling with color and life. As long as there is breath still in the body there is hope. Nicely done.

[Sakib]

Nice write. It's a very enjoyable read. Your change of colors reflects the nightlife nicely. I liked it. :)

[donny ingraham]

First love the colors, it makes reading it that much more enjoyable. Execellent write, I read it twice