merriment at the ball

09/2011

                       The occupants jostled around in the carriage

                       as it careened down the winding cobblestones 

                       sounds of light laughter carried them to the ball

                       soon they would be floating across smokeless 

                       stretches of overdone rooms and endless cliche

                       piano chords striking notes in the imagination

                          

                         Arriving, her and host strode into the thrive

                       nods of introductions and bows of curtsy   

                  graced their entrance to the grand ole hall

                  articulating discussions blended with the tunes

                  she noticed him when he entered into the room

                  his bright eyes and the curly brown lock on his head

                  accompanying his gentle yet assertive deposition

                  advancing towards him, she held up her hand

                  twas the custom invitation to a reciprocal dance

                   her petticoats sway at the

                                                     hands of this admirable pursuer

                               matching his move for move

                                                              circling the wonder of it

                                      

 

Author's Note

Often I feel as if I were born in the wrong century...

Reviews

[Zilla Z.]

My goodness, I can't believe what I'm reading... Victorian times, at their best, worded by you...
I swooned away by the gift of your pen, and your rich imagination of mind traveling...
The dance, was as soft as your words do the Waltz... I'm in awe... x

Zilla

[Thea]

Great choice of words...You use your vocabulary well...Excellent piece of writing... :)))

[Audrey Howitt]

You clearly have an affinity for an earlier time period. I can see it so clearly in this and in other pieces of yours. Your affinity shines through in the imagery you choose. So well done!

[johnnyqueer]

Wonderful imagery. This poem is very simple, yet descriptive. I love it.

[Dark Beauty]

Loved the poem and setting of the piece,great job!! Keep writing!!

[Violetta Alexis]

You are very good with words. I would like to see even MORE visual description as I see that you have the potential and talent for it.

sounds of light laughter carried them to the ball
soon they would be floating across smokeless
stretches of overdone rooms and endless cliche
piano chords striking notes in the imagination

Best part in the entire poem.

[Lily Mae]

Or maybe you lived in that one and are reliving the memories with heartfelt fondness :) I believe who we are now is from bits and pieces of who we've been..xxx

[Muse]

Often I feel as if I were born in the wrong century...
Maybe your soul is immortal?
An old soul?
Gorgeous writing Josh. I could picture everthing perfectly........I was almost there I swear!