merriment at the ball

09/2011

                       The occupants jostled around in the carriage

                       as it careened down the winding cobblestones 

                       sounds of light laughter carried them to the ball

                       soon they would be floating across smokeless 

                       stretches of overdone rooms and endless cliche

                       piano chords striking notes in the imagination

                          

                         Arriving, her and host strode into the thrive

                       nods of introductions and bows of curtsy   

                  graced their entrance to the grand ole hall

                  articulating discussions blended with the tunes

                  she noticed him when he entered into the room

                  his bright eyes and the curly brown lock on his head

                  accompanying his gentle yet assertive deposition

                  advancing towards him, she held up her hand

                  twas the custom invitation to a reciprocal dance

                   her petticoats sway at the

                                                     hands of this admirable pursuer

                               matching his move for move

                                                              circling the wonder of it

                                      

 

Author's Note

Often I feel as if I were born in the wrong century...

Reviews

[Zilla Z.]

My goodness, I can't believe what I'm reading... Victorian times, at their best, worded by you...
I swooned away by the gift of your pen, and your rich imagination of mind traveling...
The dance, was as soft as your words do the Waltz... I'm in awe... x

Zilla

[FJ Davis]

You've already received 27 reviews. Like I once told someone on this site, I don't even know that many people.
"merriment at the ball" is extremely well done and charged with romance--of both the classical and modern variety.
I found the woman's holding up of her hand as a request for being hugged to music--by a seeming stranger--to be rather sensual. To say nothing of her "petticoats sway."
You've created a lovely piece, Joshua. (No pun intended.)

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

This reminds me of like Cinderella and Sleeping Beauty - I know you are a guy and will take that the wrong way, but I love how it is old-fashion and takes place in the old centuries!

[Aidz]

kewl story/tale me like :)

[Amila Jay]

Some nice words there, cool poem:)

[Misty Blue Eyes]

bravo bravo.. what a wonderful pieces.. you did an excellent job

[Hayley]

Your imagery is excellent in this piece!! I, as well, sometimes think that. It would be simply divine if those events still happened today in the same sense of importance. Ah, I'm a romantic... Keep the works coming!

[Rene Velez]

great imagery in a dance of words and vision....

[ImagineItAll]

Ahhhh, that was so amazing to read...wonderful job on this.

[Shep]

I am not sure if you intened for the words to be arranged this way or not. It still was awesome read once I put it all togeather.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

you have transported us back in time.......lovely!