dearest naive

09/2011 (Blood type B: Installment Seven)

Screams echo out into the streets

terror laced sound waves detonating

off my decaying eardrums

I am a shadow of my former self

standing over you in this dark alley

scenery wilts around

the death that seeps from my skin

the pores leaking poisonous sweat

dripping on the ashen ground

Beware of a kind face and a

pristine stare, it could be just

a mask that I wear

                     more screams 

you should have listened to 

your friends...

Reviews

[Omar Fendri]

you know, the third stanza has an utter intensity...the words you used hold a super power related to death, decease and anarchy. It really adds to the whole poem a darker feeling. well, It is very well-expressed and your words were exactly screaming out loud. Love it from the beginning to the end.

[Rene Velez]

that's good stuff, great read...

[Shep]

I love the darkness that surrounds this poem. You are a awesome poet and this was another great read.

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it builds as you move through the poem..to a chilling conclusion..nice job.

[Katy Knight]

That's very powerful. I especially love the fianl line "You should have listened to your friends." Good job. It kept me hooked.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

powerful... especially at the end i think. i like this a lot, held my attention to the power and feeling.

[Dahlia Phoenix]

Sometimes we need to heed the words around us because those can be later thanked for. I love the dark intensity as the poem progresses down.

"Beware of a kind face and a
pristine stare, it could be just
a mask that I wear"

This stanza in particular sends a chill down your spine. That's how powerful this poem is.

[Jeremy Baker]

Intense and dark. An excellent write

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this poem. No wasted words. Direct and cold. I like the strong statements and the very nice ending. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Kenneth The Poet]

They should have listened to their friends. Nice work.

[Thea]

Gotta love the imagery here! Very well expressed, Joshua!
Like it... :)))