starlit
A Poem by
joshua deathdealer
08/2011
It's so hard to tear myself out of your tantalizing
hold, away from
your soothing touch
and take the long
walk back to where
I live which isn't home
my home is with you
inside your pleasant
gaze, forever locked
into mine, stare at me
my glorious lover
so I can remember your
elegant fa ce and
your starlit eyes
as I return to
this nightmare
without you
© 2011 joshua deathdealer
Author's Note
thanks to ivizarx for an edit help on this one..xx
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Although always dark there is also a shining light of hope in your poems.
Posted 13 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
aww joshua this is beautifully said.. always wanting to be in ones arms, to be close to the one you love..
Posted 13 Years Ago
aww joshua this is beautifully said.. always wanting to be in ones arms, to be close to the one you love..
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
take the long walk back....heart touching!!!!
Posted 13 Years Ago
take the long walk back....heart touching!!!!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
very nice heart felt flow, for the dealer of death....
Posted 13 Years Ago
very nice heart felt flow, for the dealer of death....
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
aw.... so sweet........
"I can remember your
elegant face and
your starlit eyes
as I return to
this nightmare
without you"
I can relate to this lines.... I adore this very much..... I can feel the strong emotions in these line..... thanks for the RR..... ^^,
Posted 13 Years Ago
aw.... so sweet........
"I can remember your
elegant face and
your starlit eyes
as I return to
this nightmare
without you"
I can relate to this lines.... I adore this very much..... I can feel the strong emotions in these line..... thanks for the RR..... ^^,
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Definitely an awesome write bro, I tend to attempt a lil bit of romantic poetry, but your somewhat subtle dark imagery paints a well respectable monologue for whoever this is for. Certainly better I say than any romance poems I've written so far. I would recommend editing one thing, but it really isn't necessary, if you wish me to state it I'll message you (sorry, I have to ask before I give constructive criticism for now on)... But truly, this poem is absolutely amazing ;) great work
Posted 13 Years Ago
Definitely an awesome write bro, I tend to attempt a lil bit of romantic poetry, but your somewhat subtle dark imagery paints a well respectable monologue for whoever this is for. Certainly better I say than any romance poems I've written so far. I would recommend editing one thing, but it really isn't necessary, if you wish me to state it I'll message you (sorry, I have to ask before I give constructive criticism for now on)... But truly, this poem is absolutely amazing ;) great work
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Wow, love the twist at the end.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Wow, love the twist at the end.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Added on August 28, 2011
Last Updated on December 29, 2011
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love ,
romance ,
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joshua deathdealer Casket City, FL
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