starlit

starlit

A Poem by joshua deathdealer
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08/2011

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                                    It's so hard to tear myself
                                      out of your tantalizing 
                                         hold, away from
                                      your soothing touch
                                     and take the long
                                     walk back to where
                                   I live which isn't home 
                                     my home is with you
                                   inside your pleasant
                                     gaze, forever locked
                                   into mine, stare at me
                                     my glorious lover
                                  so I can remember your
                                     elegant face and 
                                     your starlit eyes
                                      as I return to
                                       this nightmare
                                         without you

© 2011 joshua deathdealer


Author's Note

joshua deathdealer
thanks to ivizarx for an edit help on this one..xx

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Although always dark there is also a shining light of hope in your poems.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

aww joshua this is beautifully said.. always wanting to be in ones arms, to be close to the one you love..

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

take the long walk back....heart touching!!!!

Posted 13 Years Ago


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very nice heart felt flow, for the dealer of death....

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

aw.... so sweet........

"I can remember your
elegant face and
your starlit eyes
as I return to
this nightmare
without you"

I can relate to this lines.... I adore this very much..... I can feel the strong emotions in these line..... thanks for the RR..... ^^,


Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Definitely an awesome write bro, I tend to attempt a lil bit of romantic poetry, but your somewhat subtle dark imagery paints a well respectable monologue for whoever this is for. Certainly better I say than any romance poems I've written so far. I would recommend editing one thing, but it really isn't necessary, if you wish me to state it I'll message you (sorry, I have to ask before I give constructive criticism for now on)... But truly, this poem is absolutely amazing ;) great work

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow, love the twist at the end.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on August 28, 2011
Last Updated on December 29, 2011
Tags: love, romance, dark

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joshua deathdealer
joshua deathdealer

Casket City, FL



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