starlit

08/2011

                                    It's so hard to tear myself

                                      out of your tantalizing 

                                         hold, away from

                                      your soothing touch

                                     and take the long

                                     walk back to where

                                   I live which isn't home 

                                     my home is with you

                                   inside your pleasant

                                     gaze, forever locked

                                   into mine, stare at me

                                     my glorious lover

                                  so I can remember your

                                     elegant face and 

                                     your starlit eyes

                                      as I return to

                                       this nightmare

                                         without you

Author's Note

thanks to ivizarx for an edit help on this one..xx

Reviews

[Jazz]

Beautiful :) Not sure if it was intentional but there seems to be a lot of sibilants? Such as 'tantalizing', 'soothing' and 'glorious'. I like this in romantic poems because it creates a hushing sound when read aloud, similar to the tone in which you might address a lover. I just completed an A Level English course a few months back so my mind's still crammed full of the terminology :P Thank you for sharing!

[Hotwater]

Yes indeed, good emotions portrayed in this smashing write, well done to you. Very good, top draw.
*bird*

[Jeremy Baker]

A commanding write - it takes the reader by force and it's hard not to be swept away by this poem. Great work!

[Thea]

Aw, soooooo touching and beautiful...Short but meaningful... :)))

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is beautiful. A woman can make us feel like a king. I believe we must always be kind and thankful when a woman allow us in and is kind to us. I like the ending to the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[kurdapiaful]

lovely :)

[Megan]

Joshua this poem is breathtaking. Your work is always impressive, and this piece really touched my heart. Haha and I know exactly the feeling this poem is describing. I hate leaving my boyfriend's house..or just us parting in general. This is amazing!! and I'm soooo pumped that you posted this :) thanks

[Lily Mae]

I think this will speak volumes for so many.. You did a great job with penning these emotions... :) xx

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

I know this feeling when we have to leave our loved one where we feel safe and secure to return to our lives that are not as happy as we would like for them to be.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

I liked this a lot nice flow