starlit
A Poem by
joshua deathdealer
08/2011
It's so hard to tear myself out of your tantalizing
hold, away from
your soothing touch
and take the long
walk back to where
I live which isn't home
my home is with you
inside your pleasant
gaze, forever locked
into mine, stare at me
my glorious lover
so I can remember your
elegant fa ce and
your starlit eyes
as I return to
this nightmare
without you
© 2011 joshua deathdealer
Author's Note
thanks to ivizarx for an edit help on this one..xx
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OMGness! I adore this poem. So many people have felt what it is like to be away from a lover, and I believe you summed up the emotions very well
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
This was a great write. I really enjoyed it. I could relate, but I think anyone could relate to this. I loved it. Thanks for sharing.
Posted 12 Years Ago
This was a great write. I really enjoyed it. I could relate, but I think anyone could relate to this. I loved it. Thanks for sharing.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I can relate i was away from my love on for a long time. I love your work
adalynn
Posted 12 Years Ago
I can relate i was away from my love on for a long time. I love your work
adalynn
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I love that line:
'my home is with you'.
I know the feeling.
Great write.
Posted 12 Years Ago
I love that line:
'my home is with you'.
I know the feeling.
Great write.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I felt myself to be the experiencer in this, that to me is delicious reading.
Posted 12 Years Ago
I felt myself to be the experiencer in this, that to me is delicious reading.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Love these lines: gaze, forever locked
into mine, stare at me
my glorious lover
so I can remember your
elegant face and
your starlit eyes
as I return to
this nightmare
without you
Posted 13 Years Ago
Love these lines: gaze, forever locked
into mine, stare at me
my glorious lover
so I can remember your
elegant face and
your starlit eyes
as I return to
this nightmare
without you
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
amazing
Posted 13 Years Ago
amazing
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Heart tearing and touching piece... i love the feeling and captured emotions in this write in such a small space you wrote in. Love this a lot.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Heart tearing and touching piece... i love the feeling and captured emotions in this write in such a small space you wrote in. Love this a lot.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Best line is your starlit eyes.. It just gives this poem the perfect surreal quality.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Best line is your starlit eyes.. It just gives this poem the perfect surreal quality.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Added on August 28, 2011
Last Updated on December 29, 2011
Tags:
love ,
romance ,
dark
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joshua deathdealer Casket City, FL
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