cimmerian dawn

08/2011 (Blood type B: Installment Six)

The snapping sounds of their bones

did very little to drown out the ringing

of the phone shoved in my pocket

the abrupt melody jars me out of my

horrific wonderland causing me to

pause in the moonlight that glistens

off my  d i s t o r t e d   bloodstained face

gasping the harassing device I toss

it away like a child would throw an 

unwanted toy

All the things that once were mine

have died inside what was just a

beautiful dream, I've descended 

into a cimmerian dawn, a futile 

place of vanity and monstrosity

there will be no crossing over

to  s o m e w h e r e  divine, just an 

endless existence of solitude

and slavery to the manifestation 

that has taken over within 

Its a dead new day

Author's Note

Reviews

[bookworm]

To me, this is your truest, most beautiful, pristine writing voice. I fell in love with you 32 times as I read this. Mostly bc I'm freakishly enamoured with poetic phrases of lyrical perfection and every word oozed the sounds of your creative divine brilliance. Nothing contrived or forced. I felt like I finally heard "you" here. My sense is that wherever you were mentally, psychologically, spiritually while writing this is the home of your authentic self....Your Kansas.....:)

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a great write. It was as powerful as the last. I agree he is a death dealer. Sometimes the world is dead. It is just like it stops spinning....well I loved the last line. Nice write. Thanks for sharing.

[realmwriter]

I caught myself almost starting to empathize with the main character whose name I still do not know. I shall call him Death Dealer and he shall be my dead blanket to cover the stains of remorse that drip from disdain of loneliness. Okay so I'm getting sucked further in.

[Amila Jay]

Super dark writing:)

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong words took me to some good places in this poem. You are a storyteller.
"All the things that once were mine
have died inside what was just a
beautiful dream, I've descended
into a cimmerian dawn, "
I enjoyed this poem. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Crow]

I love the macabre imagery of this piece, Wonderfully dark.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I love it, very dark... love the details a lot in this, and the words you used. I really like how you added more emotion where you spaced out the letters in the couple words in each stanza, nice. And love the music as well dubstep is awesome.

[Dahlia Phoenix]

"I've descended
into a cimmerian dawn, a futile
place of vanity and monstrosity
there will be no crossing over"

Bloody brilliant! This is unbelievably morbid.

[Hayley]

Hmm..interesting shift change in this. I take it as the first stanza being the action and the second stanza as the reason and the real emotions behind the morbidness. I like your experimentation with different styles!

[Alicia Hirshey]

Love the darkside.