the hunt

08/2011 (Blood type B: Installment Four)

The sun slips underneath the horizon 

leaving behind a fading ghastly glow 

taking with it all hope for the innocents

Slowly the pale moon rises over this city

lighting the nearly empty streets

setting the stage for the bloodshed 

Crazed and whipped up into a frenzy

I emerge my abode, feeling the cool

night air caress my spectral skin

Immediately my heightened senses 

pick up on a live one, walking down 

darkened roads leading nowhere

I walk up behind the girl, unsuspecting

she turns and gasp, seeing the 

intent in my blood shot eyes

Pulling a gun she fires pointblank 

at my chest, the bullet tearing

through me brings false hope 

 

I can't die, I'm unable to release my

cursed soul from out of this haggard

carcass, her blood runs down my throat

Author's Note

Reviews

[Alexander Mccarthey]

I think that this is one of the better vampire poems that I have read in a long time. I like how it moves so seamlessly and how the description isn't encumbering. I like how you use the phrase false hope in the sixth stanza it leaves the reader wondering whether the vampire was killed and the false hope was his or whether it was the girl's. This was really good keep at it.

[realmwriter]

You draw inspiration from various sources and I like that. I like the quickening pace and the relaxed feel of the main character, very nicely done.

[Amila Jay]

Awesome:)

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I love this, a good chase; sort of say... I like the vampire picturing in this write, the scene is real nice, and great ending. Really like this.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. Allow the reader to fall into a good tale. I like the ending. Good to allow the evil win on occasion. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Oh wow...I liked the inspiration written to this lol.
I loved the poem in general. It was very nicely written. My favorite stanzas are the last two. I also like the imagery. You could make a great story out of this! Now get to it!
Thanks for sharing. :D

[Black]

such a beautiful poem
you almost inspire me to write a book
well done

[Juliet]

This is excellent and not too overdone. :) A lot of the vampire poetry I've seen lately has been.. Ugh, but this.. this is very good. I love the line "feeling the cool
night air caress my spectral skin". Very good poem all around. ^_^

[sugar]

song goes well with this, love the poem so great

[Thea]

Amazingly written poem...Great imagery...Really dark...I enjoyed reading it... :)))