forgive me

07/2011

forgive me for tomorrow
I'll be gone before you wake

before you wipe the decay
from your empty eyes
I'll be painting my face
with the remains of your
sick idea of our love

before you snort your breakfast
I'll be sitting on the ground
somewhere, ripping up blades
of grass, imagining you

before you toy with the idea of
calling me, I'll have already
thrown this phone out
the car window, imagining you

before the sun sets on the
wasteland that you call home
I'll have already swallowed
my sorrows and moved on

before the moon reaches its peak
in the midnight sky, I'll be
dancing like you were never there

because honestly you never were

Author's Note

Reviews

[Chris]

Love this.

You are very fluid with your words. I also like the progression of the poem. Slowly, the person is moving on but early on there was a moment of hallucinating grief to pass through. There really isn't much I'd criticize. Yes, it is a bit straightforward, but the simplicity of this is its strong point.
Another thing that struck me was the great ending. It drops like an anchor on dry land. Well done my friend.

[writing mojo]

If you like Silverstein, check out a band off the Saddle Creek label called Cursive, they have great lyrics and our very emo, screamo-rific...anyway; on with the poem.. I love the imagery and the lyrical ghost of something not working out you convey so well with this piece...This is definite stages of dieing inside which starts with denial, meets in the middle with anger, and concludes to closure... amazing stuff

[Suzy Q]

I really liked this. Ripping up blades of grass thinking of you, how many times have I not done that? A lot of people can relate to this and it's really well written.

[Rene Velez]

A well crafted piece of writing...

[Kenneth The Poet]

Reminds me of the Eagles song, "Already Gone", just not in their so-upbeat type of sound and tempo.

[Thea]

Love it...Keep writing... ^^

[Sabrina Demartini]

excellent write!

[Coyote Poetry]

Good music and powerful poetry. Sometime a good escape is necessary.
"before the sun sets on the
wasteland that you call home
I'll have already swallowed
my sorrows and moved on"
Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[donny ingraham]

excellent, you are truly an artist with words

[Juliet]

I love that piece as a whole. This is brilliant.

before you wipe the decay
from your empty eyes
I'll be painting my face
with the remains of your
sick idea of our love

These lines are awesome. I love your poems. Good work.