public enemies

06/2011

two worlds apart, separate lives

tangled on the battle front

                 bodies lay mangled at our hands

oh the forest we have torn down

desperately trying to reach each other  

                 oh the cities we have laid to waste

only to be in each others arms

acting on our criminal attributes 

                  reduced to our primal instincts 

now we're riding around, raining terror

our bullets shower in waves

                   they will never take us alive, my love

feeling like a scene Bonnie & Clyde 

our essence is on this long road 

                   our liveliness beats from the speakers

you laugh at the blue lights in the mirror

pointing at the absurd billboards

                    the scenery flies by in perfection

in this moment I am truly happy

please don't wake me up

Author's Note

Reviews

[-Scribe in Style-]

WOW!
There is so much in this short but powerful piece of writing! The metaphors and comparison to the army battlefield is really exhilarating. The poem creates a speed that matches that of the field. Though I comprehend the message you convey, my stronger interpretation of this is totally different to yours - for I do not see the cars so much - instead I relate to relations, changing and growth of landscapes.
Thanks for sharing your poetry.
A

[London]

as always, an excellent write =]

[ivizarx]

kinda cool subject you got going on here yo... criminals in hand, in love to the end. very emotional mate.
liked it, keep up the good work. only criticism maybe, which is purely perspective so don't fright, when using metaphors, try and keep 'em throughout the poem and don't reveal them, unless you want to in the author's note or description, sometimes that makes a piece really thought provoking and enhances the emotional impact. just a thought to ponder next time when writing ;)
no worries, I reveal my metaphors in my poem alot too, but that's just me being amateur trying to spit out a poem a day so I end up rushing most of my poetry. really enjoyed this though, thnx for the RR.

[Magic plus the mayhem.]

I love the dark visual parts of this! Great write. c:

[Helpless]

very powerful!