WOW!
There is so much in this short but powerful piece of writing! The metaphors and comparison to the army battlefield is really exhilarating. The poem creates a speed that matches that of the field. Though I comprehend the message you convey, my stronger interpretation of this is totally different to yours - for I do not see the cars so much - instead I relate to relations, changing and growth of landscapes.
Thanks for sharing your poetry.
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Ha ha sweet dream. That was a nice poem as the title is "public enemies" I'll admit a little dark on his perception but, as it all happens I guess in that position you could be truly happy. Anyways well done with descriptions, metaphors, and all.
Reminds me of the love story in the movie, Public Enemies, which I loved. And I think you really put this piece together well. It seems to flow very smoothly, which I think is good to have in a poem when necessary.
Absolutley Stonking. A classic story handled with wit, nerve and class. A great story developed with great imagry and structure. Great work that just keeps on going until the cliamx, set off in the distance. Loved every second of it.
Better a hail of bullets than the electric chair as no way to end a life shaking fouling yourself. The imagery a blur in this poem as we race along with you to your violent climax.
Love it, keep em' coming
Loved it! Spiced with adventure this reads weel, with an excitement that is nice to see coming from you. Keep the surprises coming. I like the way you shift into something new:)
"My trepidation of things past is not a song with a beginning, middle and end. But an endless symphony playing infinite variations on the same theme. One day of sadness fades into another and the .. more..