the courtship

06/2011

              I wait with my hopes at our secluded spot

                  anticipating your arrival with flowers in hand

                     the park is always empty this late at night

                       giving us the freedom and leisure we deserve

              I push my hair in the excitement that

                  hangs like static electricity in the air

                     my heart flutters like a child on a joy ride

                       as the city lights gleam through the trees

              I've been daydreaming of this moment

                  holding onto our undiluted thoughts of love 

                     for weeks our texts and phone calls have sufficed

                        but the need to collapse in each others arms

                          has overwhelmed us into complying

 

              I attempt to compose myself, glancing at the time

                 walking around the bench, pacing is more like it

                     the world around drones on, unconcerned with us

                      sitting and rummage through my pockets unconsciously 

                        hands come from behind and cover my eyes, guess who

                                       I smile, already knowing it's you  

  

Author's Note

Reviews

[ivizarx]

wasn't expecting a sweet-romance really coming from the other poems I've read through coming from you, but yet I still enjoyed it. no criticism needed. it's written good and has good form/structure with a good sense of emotions inserted about it. you're very talented bro, no doubt about it. keep up the good work :)

[Enigma]

An insight into the mind of a lover who waits anxiously, remembering the times that lacked the companionship he most desired. The imagery is beautiful and the poem is simple and easy to relate. Well done.

[Jazz]

Love it :) Especially the conclusion! Sometimes when people write in free verse, their work lacks rhythm but that's not the case here. The only thing I would suggest, though, is using more punctuation at the end of some lines to break it up a little and make it easier to read aloud. It's a brilliant poem but it's essentially one long, unwavering stream of consciousness. Commas allow the reader pauses to breathe and such which would ultimately increase the effect the work has upon them :) Thank you for sharing!

[Chris Taylor]

Very, very good romantic poem. I absolutely love the fabulous imagery and the last two lines of your poem drove home the point for me as well. There are too many good lines in this one to single out. I so enjoyed this one and I could feel the way you wrapped yourself up in this one; exposing your heart and giving it up just enough to display such a good work. Nice job. I rated this one very high!!

[Alexander Mccarthey]

I like it a change of pace from some of your darker work, but it shows that you can easily move between genres.

[MickeyM]

:) i love the last 2 lines. Sweet and romantic. Loved it

[sugar]

oo romantic i like i like

[Desmund Tiny]

Very romantic.... wahhhhh and the video... i like it..... i'm kinda a fan of Sleeping with sirens.... =D

[Dahlia Phoenix]

This was plainly adorable. Reminds me of the old love from back then when you always sneaked behind the one you love and cover their eyes. The structure of this poem was almost a way to set up what's happening. A man excited the woman of his dreams but the question is who is the woman? You can never truly know someone through text and calls but that's probably the mystery behind it. Just adorable.

[Internet Killed TV]

This was..cute. Very cute. I could relate and I liked this poem.

[Muse]

This was not expected. Such a happy and carefree poem. I could feel and see this setting perfectly painted with your words. Very charming. xo