the courtship

06/2011

              I wait with my hopes at our secluded spot

                  anticipating your arrival with flowers in hand

                     the park is always empty this late at night

                       giving us the freedom and leisure we deserve

              I push my hair in the excitement that

                  hangs like static electricity in the air

                     my heart flutters like a child on a joy ride

                       as the city lights gleam through the trees

              I've been daydreaming of this moment

                  holding onto our undiluted thoughts of love 

                     for weeks our texts and phone calls have sufficed

                        but the need to collapse in each others arms

                          has overwhelmed us into complying

 

              I attempt to compose myself, glancing at the time

                 walking around the bench, pacing is more like it

                     the world around drones on, unconcerned with us

                      sitting and rummage through my pockets unconsciously 

                        hands come from behind and cover my eyes, guess who

                                       I smile, already knowing it's you  

  

Author's Note

Reviews

[ivizarx]

wasn't expecting a sweet-romance really coming from the other poems I've read through coming from you, but yet I still enjoyed it. no criticism needed. it's written good and has good form/structure with a good sense of emotions inserted about it. you're very talented bro, no doubt about it. keep up the good work :)

[-Scribe in Style-]

Awww - sweetness!!
Well written :) nicely phrased moments of waiting.
Thanks for sharing. A

[Finally Fallen]

beautifully written and touching this actually is something that i have experienced and you captured it completely wonderful write. Thanks for posting

[patricia]

you cant win with me can you. Now your being too sweet...ha ha. Nice. Thanks.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. I like the part where the person was thinking.
"I've been daydreaming of this moment
holding onto our undiluted thoughts of love
for weeks our texts and phone calls have sufficed
but the need to collapse in each others arms
has overwhelmed us into complying "
No weakness in this poem. Just strong and hopeful dreams and desires. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Aidz]

Ive mentioned this before but I can really see yr growth in the later rights, more maturity, lines with a lot of thought....purpose

kewl write Joshua

[Jazique]

Nicely done can't really find much flaws as you show so much anticipations and excitement of the arrival of how you say it "you". It was well written with great emotions of job and excellent description of the person, place and all. In other words "bravo" and keep up the excellent work.

[~*. Jade Black .*~]

This was wonderful so Romantic in so many ways. Well done.

[Bridgette's Ink]

Wow...this is beautiful.

[Shep]

Very romantic. You got the woman killer instincts. Nicecly done.

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Beautiful..!!!!