the other side

06/2011 (published in Poets of Blood volume 2)

darkness is traded away for a time

a night full of electricity and animation

a way for the hollows to stir their weariness 

sights and sounds blast into the atmosphere 

                                  

                     lights pulsate across this sea of specters

                     hell bent on the verge of becoming undone

                     stimulation awakens muddled sensations

                     marked up faces brighten upon rapture 

                            

I dance for the relief in the moment

reveling in the exemption of your horror

treacherous scars tell the detrimental tale

losing myself in this crowd of flesh  

                     maybe tonight surrender is in order 

                     letting the weight of vehemence lift  

                     perhaps providence will loosen her

                     grasp on the direction our feet take us                                                           

Author's Note

Reviews

[WatashLegend]

second stanza lose the (s) on "pulsates" it interrupts your flow other than that your flow and imagery is spot on along with the direction of where you led this poem you touched without reaching, you as the writer became a magnet that drew your reader in.

[Sher{alynn} Veron{ica}]

Escaping in the mundane, what of magic?

[KimLove "The Beautiful ..]

Reminds me of days when I use to go to all the hot spots and loose myself to the music... You portrayal is stunning, I think your flow is perfect as is but that's just me. Really awsome write Josh

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

really nice,
enjoyed this:
darkness is traded away for a time
a night full of electricity and animation"
"especially loved this line here:
"loosing myself in this crowd of flesh"
really great title, nice music as well.

[StarSandwich]

:) Another good write, I've never been clubbing but I'm guessing this is what an atmosphere of a club would be like.

[Droll Prole]

lights pulsates across this sea of specters
hell bent on the verge of becoming undone
stimulation awakens muddled sensation
marked up faces brighten upon rapture

I miss clubbing, you have captured the atmosphere perfectly!

[Ashli The Amazing]

ooh it was very interesting [: i loved the structure. i really enjoyed it.

[Ashley]

love it. 100