the other side

06/2011 (published in Poets of Blood volume 2)

darkness is traded away for a time

a night full of electricity and animation

a way for the hollows to stir their weariness 

sights and sounds blast into the atmosphere 

                                  

                     lights pulsate across this sea of specters

                     hell bent on the verge of becoming undone

                     stimulation awakens muddled sensations

                     marked up faces brighten upon rapture 

                            

I dance for the relief in the moment

reveling in the exemption of your horror

treacherous scars tell the detrimental tale

losing myself in this crowd of flesh  

                     maybe tonight surrender is in order 

                     letting the weight of vehemence lift  

                     perhaps providence will loosen her

                     grasp on the direction our feet take us                                                           

Author's Note

Reviews

[WatashLegend]

second stanza lose the (s) on "pulsates" it interrupts your flow other than that your flow and imagery is spot on along with the direction of where you led this poem you touched without reaching, you as the writer became a magnet that drew your reader in.

[Victoria Elizabeth]

awesome

[olla]

a moving piece of work.. I like it just as it stands..

[Octob3r Star]

Nice read.

[♥ Kinnixk]

Nice structure and great use of words :) you had my attention the whole way through. Amazing :D

[Tamia123]

Wow......I loved this!! Great use of word and use of structure!!! Amazing poem!!!

[EMF]

Normally I don't comment on other peoples views, but I do disagree with your featured review. The flow is perfect as it stands. It is an exceptional piece. Strong and pulsating. A terrific read, filled wiht power and force. Great work mate.

[bookworm]

I really enjoyed this write as again, I can completely relate. I love when we are presented with such opportunities to let go of the pain we carry and just be fully engaged...it truly is nothing short of transformative. I'm glad you can permit yourself to indulge periodically. I think you did a great job bringing the reader into a place of seeing and relating...what else is there really?

[Jazique]

Owe that was creative the direction, the words, and the flow; I thought wow. Excellent job it was like a mystical thing going on as if a journey as the words spoke and interesting video. Anyways well done.

[Chris Taylor]

Dark, as per usual. I could really feel the depth of this piece. A nice work.

[realmwriter]

Must admit this is better than one I wrote simaler to this piece. I like it a lot!