the other side

06/2011 (published in Poets of Blood volume 2)

darkness is traded away for a time

a night full of electricity and animation

a way for the hollows to stir their weariness 

sights and sounds blast into the atmosphere 

                                  

                     lights pulsate across this sea of specters

                     hell bent on the verge of becoming undone

                     stimulation awakens muddled sensations

                     marked up faces brighten upon rapture 

                            

I dance for the relief in the moment

reveling in the exemption of your horror

treacherous scars tell the detrimental tale

losing myself in this crowd of flesh  

                     maybe tonight surrender is in order 

                     letting the weight of vehemence lift  

                     perhaps providence will loosen her

                     grasp on the direction our feet take us                                                           

Author's Note

Reviews

[WatashLegend]

second stanza lose the (s) on "pulsates" it interrupts your flow other than that your flow and imagery is spot on along with the direction of where you led this poem you touched without reaching, you as the writer became a magnet that drew your reader in.

[To be scene To be heard..]

The 3rd stanza is me favorite! The first and second like in that stanza stand out to me out of the whole write! Amazing job well done

[devon]

This is so dark, so deep. It's absolutely wonderful.

:)

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Oh wow! This poem actually made me think and reread this for a while, to absorb what's going on in here, and I really enjoyed doing it.

And I did find quite a few ways to interpret this poem...nice work.

[Brittni]

Very creative, and I love when I am able to read something and have images dance around my mind. I try to do it for my readers and when I read it is something I look for. Very well done.

[Priscilla Sayers]

Ah! A breath of fresh air as I feast my eyes upon one of my favorite poets. your words are always so exquisite. I love the way the image dances in my head. Wonderful!

[WhiteWillow]

Getting lost in the darkness amongst strangers for a time can be invigorating. Nice piece.

[SUGATA M]

I can feel it, it looks like 'darkness' has an animated side where the humans tend to temporarily forget the true darkness of their lives......so nice...keep going man

[Chris]

I like the images but the rhythm is just not right... to me

[S. Michael Long]

I liked it.. i think its well written, to me, (so take it as you will) its a great poem, it does however miss some of the easy to relate to functions and words of your previous writings, but i dont think thats a bad thing.. this poem is more thought provoking and i think that most readers wont spend too much time dwelling on a poem in this forum.. some may.. im just saying i usually dont.. but on this one i will (: nice write -s

[Raven Starhawk]

There are many lines here that can be considered beautiful in their own way, but this is more than anything words can describe. I love the way it flows and provokes images within. It is unique and clever. I am not sure really how to convey how it has effects me, but it has a power that will never cease.