down with the ice queen

06/2011

the snowflakes fall around me

cold sweat cleaves to my skin

my icy breath shows in the frigid air

my lungs ache from the inclemency

this numbing hyperbole is weighing me down

I have trod so far through this blizzard 

climbing glaciers and dodging bullets

thrown from your guns that are trained against me

chilled to the bone is an understatement

my blood coagulates in your arctic realm 

frost benumbs over frost, sticking to my face

blacken feet stings from this forbidden journey

but I am here to rain hell on your parade

to melt the icicles of your fraudulence 

I will swelter down the castles you have built

in this tundra that you call your heart

I will have my revenge, fire and brimstone

I will leave you forgotten and desolate

fragments for my imagination to play with

claw at the walls of your regrets

Author's Note

Reviews

[realmwriter]

Very well said Joshua. Sort of discribes Narnia in the clutches of that wicked Queen before she was cast out. But then I could be way off the mark and it simply discribes the pain you experianced in a past relationship. Then again it could be none of these and I am reading into it what is not there to be read. None the less a very well written poem my friend...!

[Megan]

Is it wrong I was thinking of The Lion, The Witch, and The Wardrobe? I enjoyed reading this even if it was wrong that I was thinking that haha, I love the way you phrase things and you have a very striking choice of words. "frost benumbs over frost, stinking to my face" you made it really easy to imagine being cold like that. This was a great piece! Thanks for posting :) and I hope you aren't too bother about my little Narnia laps haha.

[sugar]

wow amazing imagry and just all around great

[Tasha]

It was so descriptive and just so wonderful. Great job.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[Lily Mae]

I love the way you are so descriptive... an excellent write..xx

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong words made the poem a fun read. Sometime woman can be cold as ice. I like how you described the woman.
"this numbing hyperbole is weighing me down
I have trod so far through this blizzard
climbing glaciers and dodging bullets
thrown from your guns that are trained against me"
Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[WatashLegend]

The title alone made my day but you followed it up nicely with a great poem as well, great job.

[Rene Velez]

cool write josh, keep going

[Clay Feet]

Strong anger and vengeance toward someone you permitted to cause you deep pain. Your images are so keen and vivid. You make me cold before the heated anger of your wrath wishes regret upon another.

Great writing!

[Sher{alynn} Veron{ica}]

the dense darkness within

[StarSandwich]

Cold and Icee. :D well dude your emotion is still there and Still loving your work. Goof write Joshh