down with the ice queen

06/2011

the snowflakes fall around me

cold sweat cleaves to my skin

my icy breath shows in the frigid air

my lungs ache from the inclemency

this numbing hyperbole is weighing me down

I have trod so far through this blizzard 

climbing glaciers and dodging bullets

thrown from your guns that are trained against me

chilled to the bone is an understatement

my blood coagulates in your arctic realm 

frost benumbs over frost, sticking to my face

blacken feet stings from this forbidden journey

but I am here to rain hell on your parade

to melt the icicles of your fraudulence 

I will swelter down the castles you have built

in this tundra that you call your heart

I will have my revenge, fire and brimstone

I will leave you forgotten and desolate

fragments for my imagination to play with

claw at the walls of your regrets

Author's Note

Reviews

[realmwriter]

Very well said Joshua. Sort of discribes Narnia in the clutches of that wicked Queen before she was cast out. But then I could be way off the mark and it simply discribes the pain you experianced in a past relationship. Then again it could be none of these and I am reading into it what is not there to be read. None the less a very well written poem my friend...!

[turning violet]

excellent.
thank you.
~V~

[~Sarah~ Idríel T..]

Oh so strong words and so powerful poem!! It feels like thousand winters are here! :)

[Audrey Howitt]

I will swelter down the castles you have built
in this tundra that you call your heart

A magical way with words---

[InkSlinger]

Nicely done.. think the wording impressed me the most, Mr. Big Words.. enjoyed your vocabulary! Oh, and the poem was pretty darn good too.

Love the chilling cold bleak dark wintery atmosphere within this poem, remind me of this music video:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7J8d18ZkXE8

From what I can infer, this poem's environment/atmospheric presence is a metaphor for a past lover's bitter cold heart in their relationship, which of course is spelled out I think in line 16, which is an amazing feat I might add, to wait until the near last stanza before you tell what's going on, to let emotions paint the picture before telling you what it is, mark of a true artist, I hate it when people spell everything out in the beginning of their poems, loses it's edge and emotional conveyance. Great poem I must say, it's definitely a fav of mine from your collection of work I've read so far. Rather than the dark and black, this poem's painting is both gray and bleak. You can feel the cold so much it could freeze an eskimo. Your terminology is an added well-done factor to this wonderful winter wonderland of heartfelt doom. It's like mist in the Artic turning the falling dew to sleet. A creative turn about which gives me the willies with words like "inclemency" and "fraudulence". Like I said, possibly your best work yet. you can really feel the emotional presence. 100/100 bro, way to go

[Crow]

I can sense a state of emotional turmoil, likened to the the frigid cold soon to be ravenously melted. Perhaps meaning a seemingly strong state of being (illusion), being torn apart or devoured by emotional pain (reality).

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

I like how fire and ice, being opposites, each have their places in this poem.

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Really intense and I love winter so I definitely love this poem!

[Dahlia Phoenix]

Women are cold as ice, its really up to the true love to come and break it down before they become bitter and alone. This journey you speak of...it was the perfect way to make up the image that you are facing the obstacles that lie ahead of you, "dodging bullets thrown from your guns that are trained against me" That's a wonderful way to place it.

Now its your turn to break her, show that cold b***h who can be truly cold and see the light of day again.

[Thea]

Aw, the first time I looked at the title, I thought it was "Down with the ice cream"...Haha! Anyway, beautiful imagery...Love the whole poem... :)