straight jacket

06/2011

I'm a thespian in my own phantasmagoria

a runner in this marathon of subconsciousness

slowly weaving this tale of sycophancy 

I am my own tragedian on the stage of my mind

a artist of mass self destruction

painting horrors on the canvas of my insides

I am the creator of this ornament of affliction 

a architect designing this projection of a fiasco

building these walls to contain utter obscurity 

how I wish I could awake from this chimera

that these spawned malignant spirits would release me

to what remains of this disintegrated existence

but I can't come back to reality

the bars of this dream are to strong

illusion had become my actuality

this vagueness is now my verity

Reviews

[TJ]

First of all I gotta say the picture you chose for this one was awesome lol
This insanity laden piece was wonderfully written.

"but I can't come back to reality
the bars of this dream are to strong
illusion had become my actuality"
These three lines are just genius!

Very imaginative and vivid write!!

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

I loved the music; it accompanied the poem well. I have little to no idea what "phantasmagoria" means, and I'm too lazy to Google it, but other than that, I liked your word choice. I always love to see some real thought behind a poem.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

*plays the video and listens to song as i read* ... this is really good, not only a great piano music to go with the greatly combined words but a poem with words combined so great :D I'm not sure which line i like best lolz. But i like these lines of yours: "a architect designing this projection of a fiasco" ... and the last 2 lines id have to say i really nice, i loved 'em: "illusion had become my actuality" "this vagueness is now my verity"

[Cassiopia Summers]

Wow, I really like you're writing style. :) good writing. :) very descriptive and full of imagery.

[LUCIDMUSIC]

Well put, normally I hate pieces with overly complex descriptions, but I totally relate with everything in this. Well played.

[Kaylor Mason]

The wordsmithing here is really good. Nice work

[StarSandwich]

This has some intresting quotations =) Another amazing game =)

[BrokenChildren]

Very good write,An amazing peice,Your mind hasn't failed you but yet!

[Veronica Chandler]

Wow joshua! Mind bending and lovely write with a spectacular piece of music to cap it all off! I am speachless at the haunting beauty!

[Helpless]

song went with the writing like pieces of a puzzle putting themselves together! beautiful!

[Ally]

This piece is simply wonderful. I love each line and its purpose. Great write!