straight jacket

06/2011

I'm a thespian in my own phantasmagoria

a runner in this marathon of subconsciousness

slowly weaving this tale of sycophancy 

I am my own tragedian on the stage of my mind

a artist of mass self destruction

painting horrors on the canvas of my insides

I am the creator of this ornament of affliction 

a architect designing this projection of a fiasco

building these walls to contain utter obscurity 

how I wish I could awake from this chimera

that these spawned malignant spirits would release me

to what remains of this disintegrated existence

but I can't come back to reality

the bars of this dream are to strong

illusion had become my actuality

this vagueness is now my verity

Reviews

[TJ]

First of all I gotta say the picture you chose for this one was awesome lol
This insanity laden piece was wonderfully written.

"but I can't come back to reality
the bars of this dream are to strong
illusion had become my actuality"
These three lines are just genius!

Very imaginative and vivid write!!

[LilyLily]

Very good piece, I like your diction. It's not simple, but it gives a good visual of the words. My favorite lines are
'I am my own tragedian on the stage of my mind
a artist of massive self destruction
painting horrors on the canvas of my insides'
I like the last part especially, because it really has a grotesque sense to it, but creative nonetheless.

[Aidz]

Some well crafted use of language ;) It was bestus

[Arielle Ann]

wow! I got a picture of inception from here...illusions have turned into reality,and you cant return back from your dreams ,locked forever !

[Andrea Vargas]

This is lovely! desperate emotion, darkness, I love the emotion and imagery you used. very good write

[Audrey Howitt]

You truly know how to capture and hold the imagination--vividly! Great write!

[Ruth]

Hon, you really take your reader places that haunt and change their level of consciousness! This is one of your best! xoxo

[olla]

it is easy to get caught up in the mess of our own making and then feel trapped.. well done

[EMF]

B****r me. This is good. Pace, power and intensity. An exceptional exploration of mental instability. It has left me close to speechless. Damn good.

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Fabulous Job..!!!

[kurdapiaful]

sometimes, our foolish fantasy can be someone's reality :)

again, such a wonderful piece!
meticulously written ☺