deafening silence

2005

my friends have abandoned me because I'm

too broken

looking into mirror, I can see terrifying

pain unspoken 

the sheer agony that sears my soul has left me

empty and alone

the Lord God himself turned from me as I fell

before his throne

a deafening silence omits in a radius 

around me 

drowning out all of the reverberations

I used to hear

numbing all of the sensations that

I used to feel

your shade is gone, my skin burns underneath

a cursed sun

death is coming, I can smell her stench

in the air

hell is moving, i can feel the seams

of my soul began to tear

hollow spills out

filling cracks within

my bloodied eyes recoil 

I am lead by the blind

downward downward

parading this anger around

cutting skin to match

Author's Note

Reviews

[bookworm]

This is so gorgeous...I love that you are such a kindred spirit. You are so brave to let us into your world...I hope you can feel my gratitude. I often marvel at how things that feel so ugly can be painted so pretty with our words. I think that's why I write sometimes. I can control the horror a bit, make it more tolerable. Strange how stunning it looks when in the guise of poetic prose....hauntingly beautiful, as always....xx

[Inyourshadow]

Dark thoughts given voice as you describe with eloquence the state of mind and fall from grace ad man is cast into the pit of ones own oblivion.
Loved it, keep em' coming

[tanaya]

Wow.... This is dark, beautiful and twisted! I love your use of words and this poem is just amazing! Great work! I can feel your passion in this! Love it!

[KimLove "The Beautiful ..]

Very dark write Josh, tons of raw imagery. Your description of death is very scarey

[Rene Velez]

great imagery, there's a rhythm to this as if in song, nice write Josh

[knowman]

Good, but its not really the right time to review this style of writings as like I said I'm having a bad time right now with my love life.

[ImagineItAll]

Beautifully morbid.

[Kenneth The Poet]

Nice work. Favorited.

[StarSandwich]

Well this just rolls out my mouth, some kinda of flow parts but its only minor. Much like for your work :)

[Muse]

2nd line: to broken
Did you mean too broken? You must think I'm picking on you? But I'm not really, I favorited this Josh!