to watch you leave

2005

to watch you leave...

is to know such pain, its jagged edges ripping into my facade

as a stake from the garden tears in to warm, dark earth

to watch you leave...

knowing that all the while that never again will I fit myself, warm with sleep

against your back, nor feel you breathing and the beating of your heart

to watch you leave...

aware in every moment of every day that my dreams, my future

once tied with silken ribbons to yours, will never come to be

and the mornings once so silent and hopeful, us gazing at the sky

and so gently awaiting forever are now but a small piece of my past

to watch you leave...

is to know that I've lost my place of existence, my station, my hearts home

that I will wander, forever a nomad, alone and afraid

to watch you leave...

your heart a tight fist of anger and your dry eyes betray nothing of you

I cry for the both of us, my love, because you will not

my troubled dreams watch you leave, over and over again

Reviews

[Dahlia Phoenix]

"to watch you leave" That was breathtaking especially with each stanza increasing the pace as the pain becomes even more unbearable...
Sometimes we have that fear that one day the person we love will walk away harmless but at the same time, why shed tears for an undeserving person like that?
I love the poem and outstanding work.

[Megan]

Wow..I'm speechless. I think everyone who has been in a serious relationship knows that fear, and to be honest with you, I feel like that sometimes with my relationship. You captured those emotions so well with this and it's stunning. This is so raw and deep and heartfelt. I love this write joshua, you did an amazing job and thank you for posting this. I plan on sharing it with a friend of mine.

[Lily Mae]

"to watch you leave...
is to know that I've lost my place of existence, my station, my hearts home
that I will wander, forever a nomad, alone and afraid"

Your killing me here.. what a powerful write and you nailed all of the truths of leaving..xo

[Desmund Tiny]

I love this poem..... I can relate to this poem especially to the second stanza

[Muse]

I cry for both of us, my love, because you will not.............

sighhhhh so romantic, but so sad.

[Tasha]

"To watch you leave"...
Every stanza was breathtaking. I enjoyed this very much.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[TJ]

"its jagged edges ripping into my facade"
Love this line. It shows how something can happen that is so damning, and so powerful it shatters a mask we've been hiding behind for an eternity. This speaks to me bc I feel like I've recently loved this - watching someone go - very emotional and rings very true

[Black]

a poem i can relate to,
i love the second stanza
Greetz
Black

[Rene Velez]

really nice poem Josh....

[sugar]

"to watch you leave.. knowing that all the while that never agian will i fit myself, warm with sleep agianst your back, nor feel you breathing and the beating of your heart" LOVE THAT STANZA!!! amazing peice of writing (goin in my favorites)

[Thea]

"to watch you leave..." is so hurtful...Haha! XD

Great poem! :)))