discernment

05/2011

you are my casualty, your eradication

my sojourn in your country 

has brought about my descent 

falling from your smothering embrace

your pallet of a thousand stakes

my surface dies underneath your taste

this com-mixture was difficult to fathom

but I will believe in you now, now that its over

now that its murder 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Layla J Omorose]

I love the last line of this poem and I enjoyed the entire poem. There's nothing better to me than a short poem with a lot of meaning. "You are my casualty, your eradication" strong and powerful opening line. I couldn't help but think of total chaos and destruction. And cause and effect. Very good poem.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

WOW!!... I am so feeling this piece, Joshua...(having to deal with this very issue)

Sometimes it angers me when people can be so callus to others...

In the end, they are overwrought with their own insensitivities...

Excellent write!~xoxo~

[joshua deathdealer]

Thank you Robbie!! It's good to see you and yes I have learned this the hard way. It is an older poem I revisited. In my situation it was either to walk away or one of of us was going to die. And here discernment won over hindsight thankfully. Thanks again. xoxo

[Ashira Macy]

Started strong and ended with a murder. That is the way to do it! I liked the gentle intricacy in this poem, it caresses with beautiful imagery and vocabulary, but doesn't throw you down into a whirlwind of unnecessary information. Very well done.

[Joe_VILOT_]

reminds me of a girl I fell in love with what seems so many life times ago so sorrowful and touching thank ya brother and ya no longer need to feel the way the was your undoing yesterday peace be yours

[Ian Faraway]

A lot of emotion flowed through such a short poem. I enjoyed it. But this one seems different from the other poems that I've read from you. The others I've read were of self awareness and moving on. This one is about the chaos of two souls. Cause and effect. J'adore! -Ian

[TL Boehm]

succinct and strongly penned.

[CourtneyShay]

i like it

[TaylorH'sPoems]

I felt dumb to see words I didnt understand XP but thats ok. Great write

[S. Michael Long]

powerful, great lines, just enough impact, without pushing too hard.. very nice (: -s

[Chris]

Intent defines in ways little else will...