the day is new

2010

                      Awakening consciousness grows as the weight

                      of my despondency clears the air.

                       Demons retreat under a glowing light,

               ...my weakness in this war troubles me.

                    I'm unable to pull myself to confidence 

                           from despairs teary smear.

 

                  You must reach for me when they return.

                          Making known all signs of adversity.

              I will remove all infertility from my actions

                          and be prudent of derangement.

         We must communicate all issues with compliance.

                                                       My heart is yours.

               Zeal overwhelms my senses.

                                      My skin aches for your touch.

               Take my hand and know that my love is pure.

                My spirit is healed, my aspirations are lifted.

                  My longings met and my demeanor intact.

               I have dreams of forever walking by your side.

                 The day is new and our Father is waiting

                    for us to take and it and make it ours.

Author's Note

Psalms 37:12-18
12: The wicked plotteth against the just, and gnasheth upon him with his teeth.
13: The Lord shall laugh at him: for he seeth that his day is coming.
14: The wicked have drawn out the sword, and have bent their bow,
to cast down the poor and needy, and to slay such as be of upright conversation.
15: Their sword shall enter into their own heart, and their bows shall be broken.
16: A little that a righteous man hath is better than the riches of many wicked.
17: For the arms of the wicked shall be broken: but the LORD upholdeth the righteous.
18:The LORD knoweth the days of the upright: and their inheritance shall be forever.

Reviews

[Elijah Gleaves]

I like the hopeful ending. One thing as a writer I always try to challenge myself to do is to break the surface of the emotions or actions I'm trying to portray. To do that you have to show and not tell. You say in your poem, " My aspirations lifted, my longings met, my demeanor intact." But what images and descriptions can you give the reader to show that rather then just telling them?

[Thea]

"My spirit is healed, my aspirations are lifted."
Awesome poem...Stunning...I like the way you prepare such a great idea...Nice pic too! :)))

[writing mojo]

delinquent to the resting breath...you made the air a little heavier with this one..good stuff

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Feeling and hope it seems like... i like this, you touched the sense of having someone, really well.
I love these parts:
" Unable to pull myself to confidence
from despairs teary smear."

"Take my hand and know that my love is pure.
My spirit is healed, my aspirations are lifted.
My longings met and my demeanor intact.
Dreams of forever walking by your side."

[Jazique]

Nice speech and well done. you know that pic reminds me of talim from Soul caliber anyways nice job it was an interesting poem of that of a kingdom of the hearts and such. Well done.

[realmwriter]

I like the ending but over a bit heavy handed and sharp tongued for me. Though it is a good write.

[patricia]

Through this whole poem, I for some reason could hear the sound of 'Rumi', it would make a great meditation tape. Thanks.

[~Sarah~ Idríel T..]

Oh so powerful poem! =)

[Lily Mae]

Thank you Josh..this really hits me right now.. 'My spirit is healed, my aspirations are lifted. My longings met and my demeanor intact." Straight to the heart...xx

[EMMIE]

THIS IS JUST POWERFUL. WHAT ELSE CAN I SAY. THE PIC AT THE END IS HIT ;P

[Coyote Poetry]

We will fight some hard internal battles. If we are lucky. The good will victor and we will land on the good road. I like how you wrote the poem. A struggle ended with hope and a positive prayer. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote