awake

2006

     the boy awoke as the stars faded forever more

      nothing but spaces dark filled their void 

      no one ran or played in the alleys and parks anymore

      his dreams died as if someone pulled the plug

      day and night now seemed to not hold a significant change

     he no longer yearned for happiness in his heart

      or shivered in cold and rain

      his skin no longer carried a sense of beauty or image

      just a living shell containing his repetitive impulses

      his body did not walk with pride or dignity but dragged along

      a carcass, a host for numb emotions and dark realities 

     the world around him no longer shimmered in color and vibrancy 

      but hung like a gray and dreary blanket over his sleepless eyes

      others bump into him; running in a hurry to live their lies

      paying no attention and not even realizing he was there

      not that it would have mattered for he was elsewhere 

     no longer dazed and confused but shattered from reality

      torn from understanding

       weak from wisdom

          fatigue from fear

           he had awoke to an eternity without her  

Reviews

[Clay Feet]

Beautifully expressed, the pain of losing our deepest love. A reasoning mind would never permit another to have such a powerful effect on it. Love knows no reason, love rends the heart and mends the heart. Life without love is empty.

Excellent work!

[Veronica Chandler]

Wow, what a powerful write! The emotion and dispair palpable and intense like something post apacalyptic, which the poem seems to indicate on some level. Well written.

[Muse]

You are very good Josh, can't wait to see more from you!

[Elijah Gleaves]

powerful ending and imagery great work as usual

[Aleyah]

this is very striking! I can feel the emotion, wonderful job with the vocabulary, and imagery. Extremely sad & melancholy, but I love it :) great piece!