awake

2006

     the boy awoke as the stars faded forever more

      nothing but spaces dark filled their void 

      no one ran or played in the alleys and parks anymore

      his dreams died as if someone pulled the plug

      day and night now seemed to not hold a significant change

     he no longer yearned for happiness in his heart

      or shivered in cold and rain

      his skin no longer carried a sense of beauty or image

      just a living shell containing his repetitive impulses

      his body did not walk with pride or dignity but dragged along

      a carcass, a host for numb emotions and dark realities 

     the world around him no longer shimmered in color and vibrancy 

      but hung like a gray and dreary blanket over his sleepless eyes

      others bump into him; running in a hurry to live their lies

      paying no attention and not even realizing he was there

      not that it would have mattered for he was elsewhere 

     no longer dazed and confused but shattered from reality

      torn from understanding

       weak from wisdom

          fatigue from fear

           he had awoke to an eternity without her  

Reviews

[Clay Feet]

Beautifully expressed, the pain of losing our deepest love. A reasoning mind would never permit another to have such a powerful effect on it. Love knows no reason, love rends the heart and mends the heart. Life without love is empty.

Excellent work!

[London]

wow, i love your work. this is so sad,and deep..it pulls you in,the wave of emotions flowing through. nicely done

[TJ]

Amazing imagery in this poem...the way you described everything through the eyes of this broken hearted man was amazing

[StarSandwich]

O_o wow so lonesome.. :/ I feel for him loving his love and everything you got the emotion pined down to a T xD

[KimLove "The Beautiful ..]

Full of despair and loneliness, so much heartache. Touching but sad, loosing love is never easy. xo

[Alicia Hirshey]

Favorited.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

The loneliness of being without the one we love is earth shattering and heartbreaking, you have penned this well.

[Rene Velez]

heart break and loneliness is a killer, the killer of souls, you expressed it well my friend...

[Kenneth The Poet]

Life without love sucks the big one. Nice work.

[Helpless]

i agree, a very powerful write! a lot of thought went into this, your very talented. :)