awake

2006

     the boy awoke as the stars faded forever more

      nothing but spaces dark filled their void 

      no one ran or played in the alleys and parks anymore

      his dreams died as if someone pulled the plug

      day and night now seemed to not hold a significant change

     he no longer yearned for happiness in his heart

      or shivered in cold and rain

      his skin no longer carried a sense of beauty or image

      just a living shell containing his repetitive impulses

      his body did not walk with pride or dignity but dragged along

      a carcass, a host for numb emotions and dark realities 

     the world around him no longer shimmered in color and vibrancy 

      but hung like a gray and dreary blanket over his sleepless eyes

      others bump into him; running in a hurry to live their lies

      paying no attention and not even realizing he was there

      not that it would have mattered for he was elsewhere 

     no longer dazed and confused but shattered from reality

      torn from understanding

       weak from wisdom

          fatigue from fear

           he had awoke to an eternity without her  

Reviews

[Clay Feet]

Beautifully expressed, the pain of losing our deepest love. A reasoning mind would never permit another to have such a powerful effect on it. Love knows no reason, love rends the heart and mends the heart. Life without love is empty.

Excellent work!

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Awe this seems so sad, you wrote this really well, I like this.

[Jeremy Baker]

Dark and despairing - the emotions you were on your sleeve, I guess. Well written!

[Juliet]

This poem is amazing. Extremely well written and emotional. It's definitely not lacking anything, in my opinion. I think everyone can relate to losing their love, but this piece really pegs it. Great writing.

[Coyote Poetry]

Love make us live and can make us died. I like the desire and feel of the words in this poem. I could feel the pain and disappointment in the words. A powerful ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[kurdapiaful]

letting go is a CHOICE, moving on is a PROCESS ☺

[Jazique]

Sadness here too to awaken without someone you care for and such wonderful descriptions were in play creating great images. Anyways well done with expressions in the poetry and how the the readers can fall into.

[Audrey Howitt]

Really well done Josh! Great writing!

[Lily Mae]

"Torn from understanding"...very intense and well done..x

[Shep]

Wow what raw emotion. Such courage. Awesome job.

[Shep]

Wow what raw emotion. Such courage. Awesome job.